Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more structured and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details (where, what equipment or style, and why), and avoid repetition and filler words like “um” or repeating “I love”. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, “because” or “for instance”).

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I especially like photographing landscapes when I travel because I can capture unique angles of mountains and lakes, and then I share the best shots with friends on social media. For example, last month I photographed a sunset by a river and edited the colors to highlight the reflection.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and then give specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and filler sounds. Instead of listing generic items, pick one or two illustrative features (e.g., mountains and flowers) and explain why they appeal to you (peacefulness, colors, variety).

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because they offer more natural variety and tranquility. For instance, I enjoy photographing mountains and wildflower meadows since they provide vibrant colors and peaceful settings that are hard to find in cities.

제안: Give a direct answer and support it with specific, relevant reasons without hesitation or vague phrases. Mention concrete examples and explain briefly why they matter (familiarity, natural beauty, cultural significance). Avoid inaccurate or exaggerated claims and filler words.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because I’m familiar with the landscapes and they have special cultural meaning for me. For example, our mountain ranges, notable rivers and serene lakes are places I know well and enjoy photographing because I can capture familiar scenes with personal memories attached.

× I love taking pictures of different views as my hobbies to travel, and I love taking photos and sharing them at social media with my friends.

✓ I love taking pictures of different views as a hobby when I travel, and I enjoy taking photos and sharing them on social media with my friends.

Use singular 'a hobby' because 'hobby' here is a singular general activity; 'as my hobbies' is incorrect. Use 'when I travel' for time expression. Use 'enjoy' for variety and natural phrasing. Preposition 'on social media' is correct instead of 'at social media'. Suggestions: replace 'my hobbies' with 'a hobby', replace 'to travel' with 'when I travel', replace 'love taking photos and sharing them at social media' with 'enjoy taking photos and sharing them on social media'.

× Having different pictures from different angles is so much fun.

✓ Having pictures from different angles is so much fun.

Redundant use of 'different' twice is stylistically awkward. Removing the first 'different' improves clarity and naturalness. Keep one 'different' before 'angles' to convey variety.

× I prefer rural area because rural area has so many beautiful views, mountains, lakes, river, ponds and all comparing to the rural umm urban area.

✓ I prefer rural areas because rural areas have so many beautiful views: mountains, lakes, rivers, ponds, and so on, compared to urban areas.

Use plural 'rural areas' and 'urban areas' when speaking generally. List items should use plural ('rivers') for consistency. 'and all' is informal; use 'and so on' or 'etc.' Use 'compared to' for comparison. Also adjust verb agreement: plural subject 'rural areas' needs plural verb 'have'.

× But umm rule uh rural area has so many different kinds of flowers views.

✓ But rural areas have so many different kinds of flower views.

Correct speaker hesitations removed. Use 'rural areas' plural to match general meaning and 'have' for agreement. 'Flowers views' is incorrect word order; use 'flower views' or better 'types of flowers' or 'varieties of flowers'. A clearer version: 'But rural areas have many different kinds of flowers.'

× I prefer view in my own country because as you know, my country is so beautiful, though it is small but uh, beautiful.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because, as you know, my country is very beautiful; though it is small, it is beautiful.

Use plural 'views' to match 'taking pictures of different views' and general preference. Add commas and conjunctions for clarity. Avoid repeating 'beautiful'; use punctuation to join clauses. Maintain present simple tense.

× With umm, best scenarios, best umm, best mountains like Mount Everest, different rivers, different lakes.

✓ It has great scenery, such as impressive mountains like Mount Everest, various rivers, and different lakes.

Original is a sentence fragment lacking a main verb. Provide a complete sentence with subject and verb: 'It has great scenery, such as...' Remove hesitations and organize items with parallel structure ('mountains ... , rivers, and lakes'). Use adjectives 'various' or 'different' appropriately.