Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản (thì và chia động từ), rút gọn câu để tự nhiên hơn, và thêm chi tiết cụ thể với liên từ để mạch lạc. Cụ thể: sửa lỗi chia động từ (have -> have/has), thêm giới từ và mạo từ (taking pictures of scenery/portraits/flowers), và viết tối đa 3-4 câu. Ví dụ, bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề ngắn, sau đó nêu lý do và một ví dụ cụ thể về nơi bạn chụp.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy taking pictures of different views. I especially like photographing landscapes, portraits and flowers because it relaxes me and helps me notice small details. For example, I often walk in the nearby park to capture flowers in the morning light, which makes me feel happy and creative.

제안: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng từ chính xác (prefer, prefer taking pictures in urban areas; reasons are; landscapes and towers), đồng thời dùng liên từ để nối ý và nêu ví dụ cụ thể. Tránh diễn đạt lặp và kéo dài không cần thiết. Nên có một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, một hoặc hai câu giải thích, và một ví dụ minh họa.

예시: I prefer photographing urban views because cities offer varied architecture and interesting landmarks. For instance, tall towers and modern buildings create strong shapes and contrasts that look great in photos. Also, busy streets provide chances to capture dynamic scenes.

제안: Giữ giọng tự nhiên, tránh dùng cụm từ thiếu lịch sự (it's so embarrassed), sửa ngữ pháp (other countries, pictures, have -> has), và cung cấp lý do cụ thể kèm ví dụ. Nên trình bày nhẹ nhàng hơn khi so sánh đất nước, nêu điểm cụ thể bạn tìm kiếm khi đi chụp ảnh (ví dụ: kiến trúc lịch sử, cảnh tự nhiên).

예시: I usually prefer photographing views in other countries because I find more diverse scenery and historic architecture there. For example, when I traveled to Japan I could capture traditional temples and colorful streets that don't exist in my city. These unique subjects inspire me to take more creative photos.

× Honestly, I have to say that I am a person who have a strong passion in taking scenery, portrait and flowers pictures.

✓ Honestly, I have to say that I am a person who has a strong passion for taking scenery, portrait, and flower pictures.

'Who have' is incorrect because the relative pronoun 'who' refers to the singular noun 'a person', so the verb must be 'has' (subject-verb agreement). Use 'passion for' not 'passion in'. Use the noun form 'flower pictures' (or 'photos of flowers') and include commas in a list.

× The reason because I feel happy and enjoy taking picture around where I living.

✓ The reason is that I feel happy and enjoy taking pictures of the places where I live.

'The reason because' is redundant; use 'The reason is that'. 'Taking picture' should be plural 'taking pictures'. 'Around where I living' is ungrammatical; use 'of the places where I live' and change 'living' to the present tense verb 'live'.

× Honestly I actually referred taking picture in urban areas.

✓ Honestly, I actually prefer taking pictures in urban areas.

'Referred' is the wrong verb form and wrong verb choice; use 'prefer' (present simple) to express preference. 'Taking picture' should be plural 'taking pictures'. Add a comma after the introductory word 'Honestly'.

× The reason are really simple.

✓ The reason is really simple.

The subject 'The reason' is singular, so the verb must be 'is' not 'are'.

× First of all in urban areas it has a lot of landscape and tower so it's make me feel like it's often modern than rural area.

✓ First of all, urban areas have a lot of landscapes and towers, so they make me feel that they are often more modern than rural areas.

Use plural subject 'urban areas' with plural verb 'have'. 'Landscape' and 'tower' should be plural: 'landscapes and towers'. 'It's make' is ungrammatical; use 'they make'. 'It's often modern than' should be 'they are often more modern than' to form a correct comparative and agreement with plural 'areas'.

× For me it's so embarrassed, but I have to say one thing that in my city there's nothing for me or for you to take any pictures because it's really boring.

✓ For me it's so embarrassing, but I have to say that in my city there is nothing for me or you to take pictures of because it is really boring.

Use adjective 'embarrassing' not past participle 'embarrassed' when describing a situation. 'There's' is acceptable contraction of 'there is' but better to write 'there is nothing ... to take pictures of' to place the preposition at the end. 'Any pictures' can be 'pictures' here. Use full 'it is' or contraction consistently.

× I think that other country have more landscape and scenery than my country.

✓ I think that other countries have more landscapes and scenery than my country.

'Other country' should be plural 'other countries' when speaking generally, and must agree with plural verb 'have'. 'Landscape' should be plural 'landscapes'. Alternatively, 'another country has more landscape and scenery than my country' could be used if referring to a single country.