Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear and concise. Start with a simple topic sentence directly answering the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use correct nouns (views, scenes) and avoid repetition. Connect ideas with a linking word or short phrase, and keep to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, seaside scenes feel calm because of the water and soft light, while city streets feel energetic with tall buildings and neon signs. Therefore, each scene creates a different mood in photographs.

제안: Answer directly then give clear reasons. Avoid filler words (uh) and correct vocabulary (views, areas). Use linking words like “because” to explain preference and give a specific example of what you like in urban views.

예시: I like both, but if I had to choose, I prefer urban views because I enjoy the architectural variety and lively atmosphere. For instance, skyscrapers against a sunset create dramatic silhouettes that look great in photos.

제안: Make a clear, grammatical topic sentence and then give a specific condition or example. Use correct tense and word order, and include a linking word such as “however” or “if” to structure the answer. Keep it to two sentences for clarity.

예시: It depends on the location; I enjoy views from both my country and abroad. For example, I like photos taken at famous tourist spots anywhere, such as historic sites at home or iconic landmarks overseas.

× The different wheel has a different vibe and.

✓ Different wheels have different vibes.

Original uses singular 'wheel' then refers to them generally and ends with an incomplete clause. This is a plural reference, so use plural nouns and plural verb 'have' for subject-verb agreement. Also remove the trailing 'and' which makes the sentence incomplete. Suggestion: use 'Different wheels have different vibes.'

× Each has their own beautiful

✓ Each has its own beauty.

'Each' is singular, so the possessive pronoun should be singular 'its' (not 'their'). Also 'beautiful' is an adjective and needs a noun; 'beauty' fits the intended meaning. Suggestion: 'Each has its own beauty.'

× If you took a picture of different wheels, you can have a different mood.

✓ If you take pictures of different wheels, you can create different moods.

The conditional mixes past tense 'took' with present ability 'can'. For a general condition use simple present 'take'. Also pluralize 'pictures' and 'moods' to match generality, and use 'create' or 'capture' instead of 'have' for clearer meaning. Suggestion: 'If you take pictures of different wheels, you can create different moods.'

× I actually like both, but if I have to choose one, I will choose the urban areas.

✓ I actually like both, but if I had to choose one, I would choose urban areas.

This is a hypothetical preference, so use the conditional form 'if I had to' + 'would choose' rather than 'if I have to' + 'will choose'. Also 'urban areas' is a general plural noun and does not need 'the'. Suggestion: 'If I had to choose one, I would choose urban areas.'

× Uh, if you mean in the wheels, there a lot of a sky, uh, building and the sunset is great.

✓ If you mean in the city, there is a big sky, many buildings, and the sunset is great.

Original has multiple article and structure errors. 'In the wheels' is unclear — likely meant 'in the city' or 'in urban areas'. Use 'there is' for singular existence ('a big sky') and 'many buildings' for plural count nouns. Include commas and 'and' correctly. Suggestion: 'If you mean in the city, there is a big sky, many buildings, and the sunset is great.'

× Is depend on the place that the picture was took.

✓ It depends on the place where the picture was taken.

Sentence lacks subject 'It' and uses incorrect verb forms: 'depend' should be 'depends' for third person singular. Use relative 'where' instead of 'that' for place, and the correct past participle 'taken' instead of 'took'. Suggestion: 'It depends on the place where the picture was taken.'

× If the picture was taken in the a tourist attraction area, my own country would be nice also in others.

✓ If the picture was taken in a tourist attraction, my own country would be nice, but other countries can be nice too.

Remove the extra article 'the a' and simplify 'tourist attraction area' to 'a tourist attraction'. The original sentence awkwardly compares countries; clarify by adding 'but' and 'can be' to show possibility for other countries. Suggestion: 'If the picture was taken in a tourist attraction, my own country would be nice, but other countries can be nice too.'