Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は意図は伝わりますが、言い直しやフィラーが多く、語彙の誤用（shoes→scenes/views）や文法の乱れがあります。具体性や流暢さを増すために、フィラーを減らし、一文で要点を述べ、続けて理由や具体例を短く付け加えてください。例えば“I enjoy taking photos while traveling because I can capture beautiful landscapes and share them online.”のように練習しましょう。発音の明瞭さと文法（動名詞の使い方）にも注意してください。

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. I especially like photographing landscapes when I travel because they are often unique and I like sharing them online with friends and family.

제안: 考えは明確ですが、文法ミス（a children→a child/when I was a child、seen→scene?）とフィラーが多く、語順や冠詞の誤りもあります。まずは簡潔な主文（I prefer rural areas.）を述べ、その後に理由と一つの具体例を付ける練習をしてください。接続詞（because、since）を使って論理を明確にしましょう。発音と流暢さの改善も必要です。

예시: I prefer rural areas because I grew up in the countryside and appreciate the abundant nature there. For example, I enjoy quiet fields and clear rivers that you don’t often find in cities.

제안: 主旨は伝わりますが、冗長な繰り返し（very famous for…を二度言う）、不完全な文末、数や冠詞の誤り（a lot of beautiful scenery→many beautiful scenes/beautiful sceneryは不可算）があります。回答は主文→理由→具体例の順で、繰り返しを避け明確に話す練習をしてください。観光客に人気な理由（landmarks, culture, landscapes）を一つ挙げると説得力が増します。

예시: I prefer views in my own country because my hometown has many beautiful landscapes. For instance, it has famous mountains and traditional villages that attract lots of foreign tourists.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I like umm, well, I like travel, traveling upload and taking picture of a lot of beautiful shoes so.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I like to travel, upload photos and take pictures of many beautiful scenes.

You used inconsistent verb forms and incorrect noun choices. Use the infinitive 'to travel' after 'like' for variety or the -ing form consistently (e.g., 'liking travelling'), but here 'I like to travel' is natural. 'Upload' needs an object; use 'upload photos'. 'Taking picture' should be plural 'take pictures'. 'Beautiful shoes' is likely a wrong word; context suggests 'scenes' or 'views'. Improve by using parallel structure: 'I like to travel, upload photos and take pictures.'

× I prefer uh rural areas, seen uh because when I was a children I lived in rural area, uh, where it's rich nature so I enjoy views.

✓ I prefer rural areas because when I was a child I lived in a rural area where there was rich nature, so I enjoyed the views.

Tense and number errors: 'children' is plural but you need singular 'child'. 'Rural area' needs an article 'a rural area'. Use past tense 'was' and 'lived' to match 'when I was a child'. 'It's rich nature' is incorrect; use 'there was rich nature' or better 'it had beautiful nature'. 'Enjoy' should be past 'enjoyed' to match the time frame. Suggestions: keep tense consistent and use correct singular/plural nouns and articles.

× I love, uh, my own country's views because in my hometown there are a lot of beautiful scenery and umm, it is very famous for uh, well, it is very famous for foreign tourist, so I prefer views in.

✓ I love my country's views because in my hometown there is a lot of beautiful scenery and it is very famous with foreign tourists, so I prefer the views there.

'A lot of beautiful scenery'—'scenery' is an uncountable noun and should be paired with 'a lot of' plus singular agreement 'there is'. 'Foreign tourist' should be plural 'foreign tourists'. 'Prefer views in.' is incomplete; add 'the views there' or 'views in my country'. Use article 'the' for 'the views' when referring to specific views. Suggestions: use correct articles and pluralize nouns where needed.