Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is natural and relevant, but a bit disjointed and slightly repetitive. Improve coherence by using a clear topic sentence followed by 1–2 linked supporting details. Use linking words (for example, "also" or "in addition") and vary vocabulary (e.g., "landscapes" instead of repeating "scenic"). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I do — I really enjoy photography. I usually carry my camera because I love capturing landscapes, especially mountain scenes, and I also like taking portraits of people. For example, when I visit a viewpoint I try to shoot during golden hour to get warm light on the faces and the scenery.

제안: The content answers the question but the response is confused, contains repetitions and unfinished phrases. Structure your reply: state preference, give clear reasons, and add a brief example. Use linking words (because, so, therefore) and avoid hesitations or filler words. Aim for 2–3 well-formed sentences.

예시: I prefer rural areas because I grew up in a very busy city in the Philippines, so I enjoy the peace and open scenery here in New Zealand. For example, we often take long drives to the countryside to photograph rolling hills and quiet coastlines, which helps me relax and find fresh inspiration.

제안: Your answer is somewhat off-topic and unclear. The question asks whether you prefer views at home or abroad; instead you explained limited travel experience. Reframe: give a direct preference, then qualify it with travel limitations and a specific reason. Use accurate, concise language and avoid filler sounds.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy discovering new landscapes and cultures; however, I haven't explored all of the Philippines because it is an archipelago with over 7,000 islands. Therefore I can't compare everything, but I often seek out foreign destinations for different scenery and new photographic subjects.

× I have haven't had a chance to explore all of the Philippines because it's a very big umm country.

✓ I haven't had a chance to explore all of the Philippines because it's a very large country.

The original contains a double auxiliary 'have haven't' which is incorrect. Use 'haven't had' as the present perfect negative form. Also 'big umm country' is informal and redundant; use 'large country' for clarity. Suggestion: use one auxiliary and avoid filler words.'

× We have like UH-7000 more than 7000 islands.

✓ We have more than 7,000 islands.

The original mixes informal filler 'like' and 'UH-7000' with the correct phrase 'more than 7000 islands.' Use the standard numeric form 'more than 7,000 islands' for clarity and remove fillers. Use commas for thousands.'

× So I can't really say that I visited more countries.

✓ So I can't really say that I have visited many countries.

The tense and structure are awkward. The speaker means they have not visited many countries, so present perfect 'have visited' fits; use 'many countries' rather than 'more countries' which compares with an unstated reference. 'More' implies comparison and is unclear.'

× I prefer the rural areas because in the Philippines, back in the Philippines, I lived in a very busy area or a very busy city.

✓ I prefer rural areas because, back in the Philippines, I lived in a very busy city.

'I prefer the rural areas' is acceptable but 'the' is unnecessary; 'rural areas' is more natural. 'A very busy area or a very busy city' is redundant; use one clear noun 'city.' Remove repetition 'in the Philippines, back in the Philippines.' Clean sentence structure improves clarity.'

× So now that I'm here in New Zealand, I enjoy the rural areas when we not whenever we had the cha, we have the chance to do long drives.

✓ Now that I'm here in New Zealand, I enjoy rural areas, especially when we have the chance to go on long drives.

The original has many fillers and broken phrases ('when we not whenever we had the cha'). Correct by removing fillers and using a clear subordinate clause: 'when we have the chance to go on long drives.' Use 'go on' with 'long drives' and place modifiers ('especially') for emphasis.'

× I actually enjoy photography. I have my camera with me all the time because I love taking scenic pictures, especially the mountains.

✓ I actually enjoy photography. I have my camera with me all the time because I love taking scenic pictures, especially of the mountains.

Add the preposition 'of' before 'the mountains' to indicate what the scenic pictures depict. Without 'of' the phrase is incomplete. Maintain article 'the' before 'mountains' if referring to mountains in general landscapes.'

× Or I can also do portraits. I love taking pictures of people.

✓ I can also take portraits. I love taking pictures of people.

Use the verb 'take' with 'portraits' rather than 'do portraits.' 'Do portraits' is informal and nonstandard. 'Can also take' matches ability/modal usage and parallels 'I love taking...'.'