Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant and gives a clear example, but it's slightly repetitive ("scenery, scenes") and could be more concise and natural. Limit to 3–4 sentences, use a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail with a linking phrase. Vary vocabulary (e.g., "landscapes," "lighting") and avoid redundancy.

예시: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing different views because I like capturing unique landscapes and lighting. For example, last week I photographed the city skyline at sunset to remember the warm colors and tranquil atmosphere. I find these photos help me recall the mood of the place.

제안: The response states a clear preference but contains repetition ("different different") and informal language ("'cause"). Expand briefly with a reason and one specific example, and use linking words (e.g., "because," "for example") to improve coherence. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

예시: I prefer views in urban areas because cities offer a wide variety of subjects, from architecture to street life. For example, I enjoy photographing modern buildings, busy markets, and colorful murals, which provide more creative opportunities than rural areas.

제안: The answer is short and vague. Give a direct topic sentence stating a preference or balance, then explain why with one or two specific reasons and an example. Use linking words like "however" or "also" to structure the idea and avoid one-word phrases like "Mix of both."

예시: I enjoy views both at home and abroad, but for different reasons. At home, I appreciate familiar landscapes and cultural details, while when I travel I enjoy discovering new scenery and architectural styles; for instance, I loved photographing coastal villages at home and historic streets when I visited Europe.

× To be honest, I prefer views in urban areas 'cause you will have a lot of scenes to capture and different different views as well.

✓ To be honest, I prefer views in urban areas because you have a lot of scenes to capture and different views as well.

Problems: 1) Use of 'you will have' shifts to future; in a general statement simple present 'you have' is correct (Present tense issue, ID 6). 2) Colloquial contraction ''cause' is informal; use 'because' for speaking test. 3) Repetition 'different different' is a redundancy (Sentence structure/error, ID 26). Suggestion: Use simple present for general truths ('you have'), replace ''cause' with 'because', and remove the duplicated word so the sentence reads smoothly.

× I prefer views in my own country and in other countries. Mix of both.

✓ I prefer views in both my own country and other countries; a mix of both.

Problems: 'Mix of both.' is a sentence fragment lacking a verb (Sentence without a verb, ID 23) and feels informal. Suggestion: Combine into one complete sentence using 'a mix of both' with a verb or attach it to the previous sentence. This maintains parallel structure and clarity.