Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant but a bit brief and slightly vague. Improve by starting with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details (what types of views you enjoy, why you photograph them, and an example). Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid redundancy.

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different landscapes, especially dramatic mountain scenery. For example, I like taking pictures of the Andes because of their rugged peaks and changing light; in addition, I often capture nearby features such as glaciers and rivers to show context. I find that these varied elements make my photos more interesting and tell a stronger story.

제안: This answer is off-task and asks the examiner a question, which is not appropriate. Instead, state a clear preference (or say you have none) and justify it with specific reasons and examples. Use linking words to make the response coherent and keep it concise.

예시: I tend to prefer rural views because they offer natural scenery and quieter surroundings. For instance, I enjoy photographing rolling hills and forests where there is less human-made clutter, which allows me to focus on natural light and textures. However, I also appreciate urban views for their architectural details and lively atmosphere.

제안: Your answer answers the question but becomes conversational and ends with a question to the examiner. Give a concise opinion and support it with specific comparisons and reasons. Mention one or two concrete examples and use linking words to structure the answer without asking the examiner questions.

예시: I appreciate views in my own country because they feel familiar and culturally significant, but I also enjoy landscapes abroad for their diversity. For example, Spain’s historic coasts offer dramatic cliffs and architecture, while South America’s Andes and the Amazon present unique biodiversity and dramatic relief; therefore, I like both for different reasons.

× I don't really have a preference 'cause I am not sure what the difference is.

✓ I don't really have a preference because I am not sure what the difference is.

Using ''cause'' is an informal spoken contraction of ''because'' and may be inappropriate in a formal or test context. Replace it with ''because'' for correct standard written English. Also ensure clarity by keeping the sentence as a single clause.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views like the Andes Mountains, including other physical features.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views, such as the Andes Mountains and other physical features.

Use ''such as'' (or ''for example'') rather than ''like'' when introducing examples in formal English. Also use ''and'' rather than a comma before ''including'' to make the list clearer; here ''including'' is replaced with ''and'' to produce a natural phrasing.

× I think my country has very unique views, but other countries such as Spain or South America have very beautiful views.

✓ I think my country has very unique views, but other places, such as Spain or countries in South America, also have very beautiful views.

''Other countries such as Spain or South America'' mixes a country (Spain) with a continent/region (South America). Use ''places'' or rephrase to compare consistent categories: ''Spain'' and ''countries in South America''. This fixes the categorical inconsistency and improves clarity.

× Like in South America they have the Andes Mountains or the Amazon rainforest.

✓ For example, in South America there are the Andes Mountains and the Amazon rainforest.

Beginning a sentence with ''Like'' is informal and can create a sentence fragment or unclear structure. Use ''For example'' and the existential ''there are'' to introduce examples of features. Also use ''and'' instead of ''or'' to indicate both notable features exist.

× What would be your favorite?

✓ What would be your favorite view?

The question ''What would be your favorite?'' is grammatically acceptable but vague; adding the noun ''view'' clarifies the referent (favorite what?). This improves precision in responding to the examiner's topic.