Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific example with a brief reason. Use linking words and avoid filler sounds like “uh.”

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because varied landscapes uplift my mood. For example, I often photograph mountains and the ocean since their colours and textures are striking, and they help me feel calm.

제안: Clarify the response (remove confusing phrase “in a film”), correct phrasing and word choice (use ‘nature’ without plural, and ‘unwind’ as a verb). Provide one clear reason and a linking word to expand briefly.

예시: I prefer rural views because nature—mountains, trees and rivers—helps me relax. For instance, when I walk beside a river, I feel less stressed and more focused.

제안: Correct vocabulary errors (likely meant ‘scenes’ or ‘views’ not ‘bills’) and tense/grammar (use present simple: ‘appreciate’). Start with a direct answer, give a specific cultural example, and avoid vague phrasing.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because I appreciate our culture and traditions. For example, in Japan the cherry blossom season and local festivals create a unique atmosphere that I rarely experience abroad.

× Absolutely, I love taking pictures of different views because a variety of landscapes and scenery makes me feel happy and make me want to take a picture more.

✓ Absolutely, I love taking pictures of different views because a variety of landscapes and scenery make me feel happy and make me want to take pictures more.

Subject-verb agreement with compound subject 'a variety of landscapes and scenery' requires plural verb 'make' rather than 'makes'. Also maintain consistent plural 'pictures' to match 'taking pictures' earlier; 'take a picture more' is awkward and unidiomatic, so use 'take pictures more' or 'take more pictures'. Suggestion: ensure subjects that imply plural (a variety of X and Y) use plural verbs and keep number consistency in related nouns.

× Uh, for example, I often take picture of mountains and ocean.

✓ Uh, for example, I often take pictures of mountains and the ocean.

Count nouns need correct plural form: use 'pictures' (plural) for repeated activity. 'Ocean' here is a singular common noun that refers to a specific body of water in a general sense; include the definite article 'the ocean' or use plural 'oceans'. Suggestion: use 'take pictures of' when describing habitual photographing and include articles appropriately.

× Uh, in a film, I would say I really like rural areas because there are so many natures such as mountains, trees, rivers.

✓ Uh, in general, I would say I really like rural areas because there is so much nature such as mountains, trees, and rivers.

'Many' is used with countable nouns; 'nature' is uncountable so use 'so much nature' not 'so many natures'. Also 'in a film' seems contextually wrong; 'in general' fits the question. Use singular verb 'is' with uncountable noun 'nature'. Add comma-separated items with 'and'. Suggestion: identify whether nouns are countable or uncountable and choose quantifiers accordingly (many/few for countable, much/little for uncountable).

× I really like nature because it makes me feel relaxed and unwind.

✓ I really like nature because it makes me feel relaxed and helps me unwind.

Parallel structure requires both verbs to be in compatible forms; 'relaxed' is an adjective and 'unwind' must be matched. Use a verb phrase 'helps me unwind' or 'allows me to unwind'. Alternatively, use 'feel relaxed and relaxed' (redundant). Suggestion: maintain parallelism by pairing 'feel relaxed' with 'help me unwind' or use 'feel relaxed and relaxed' is incorrect.

× I prefer bills in my own country because I really appreciated our culture and traditions, which I find fascinating.

✓ I prefer buildings in my own country because I really appreciate our culture and traditions, which I find fascinating.

'Bills' is incorrect word choice; likely intended 'buildings' or 'bills' is wrong. Also tense: use present 'appreciate' to match current preference rather than past 'appreciated'. Article usage: 'in my own country' is fine. Suggestion: choose correct noun and use present tense for ongoing states.

× For example, in Japan, the cherry blossom season and local festival create a unique atmosphere that I don't often find abroad.

✓ For example, in Japan, the cherry blossom season and local festivals create a unique atmosphere that I don't often find abroad.

Subject 'cherry blossom season and local festivals' is plural so plural verb 'create' is correct (sentence already had 'create'). However 'local festival' should be plural 'local festivals' to match general reference; keep present simple 'don't often find' to indicate current, recurring experience. Suggestion: ensure consistent plurality when speaking generally about recurring events.