Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 응답이 불명확하고 반복이 있으며 문법 오류가 많습니다. 먼저 질문에 직접 답하는 주제 문장을 명확히 하고, 이유를 한 두 문장으로 구체적으로 설명하세요. 연결어(if/so/because 등)를 적절히 사용하고, 불필요한 반복을 제거하세요. 또한 단수/복수, 동사 형태와 어휘(예: "remember", "store")를 정확히 고치세요.

예시: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photos help me remember places and moments. For example, when I visit a new city I photograph landmarks and street scenes, so I can look back and recall details later.

제안: 대답이 혼란스럽고 모순된 표현(도시 선호 vs 농촌 선호)이 있습니다. 먼저 명확한 입장을 밝히고, 그 이유를 구체적인 예시로 뒷받침하세요. 연결어(For example, because, so)를 사용해 논리를 정리하고, 문장 수는 2~3문장으로 유지하세요.

예시: I prefer urban areas because I enjoy the architecture and the lively atmosphere. For example, I like walking among tall buildings and busy markets where there are lots of cafés and people, which feels energetic and interesting.

제안: 답변이 비문과 모호한 표현으로 완성도가 낮습니다. 먼저 간단명료하게 선호를 밝히고, 왜 다른 나라를 선호하는지 구체적 이유(문화적 차이, 새로운 풍경, 사진 기회 등)를 제시하세요. 어색한 말줄임(umm)과 미완성 문장은 피하고, 2~3문장으로 요약하세요.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they offer new and diverse scenery I don't see at home. For instance, traveling abroad lets me photograph unique architecture and landscapes, which makes my photo collection more interesting.

× I prefer taking picture because I can't memory in my smartphone, so I prefer taking pictures.

✓ I prefer taking pictures because I can't store memories on my smartphone, so I prefer taking pictures.

The noun 'picture' must be plural when speaking about the general activity of taking photos ('taking pictures') — this is a singular/plural issue. Also 'memory' is a countable/uncountable misuse; 'store memories' or 'save photos' is more natural. Use the plural 'pictures' consistently and replace 'can't memory in my smartphone' with 'can't store memories on my smartphone' or 'can't save them on my smartphone.' Suggestion: change 'picture' to 'pictures' and rephrase the second clause to 'I can't store memories on my smartphone'.

× I prefer urban areas more than rural areas because I love a lot, love viewing a lot of buildings and many people.

✓ I prefer urban areas to rural areas because I really love seeing a lot of buildings and many people.

'Prefer ... to' is the correct comparison structure rather than 'prefer ... more than' — this is a third-person usage/structure issue related to comparison; also the verbs describing likes should be in the base form with an adverb (I really love seeing...). 'Love viewing a lot of buildings' is awkward; use 'seeing a lot of buildings.' Suggestion: use 'prefer A to B' and replace 'love a lot, love viewing a lot of buildings' with 'really love seeing a lot of buildings'.

× So I preferred rural area. I know.

✓ So I don't prefer rural areas. I know.

The student used past tense 'preferred' incorrectly when describing a current preference; this is a past tense error. Also 'rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' to match context. The intended meaning seems present, so use present tense 'don't prefer' and pluralize 'areas.' Suggestion: use present tense for current preferences and match plural forms: 'I don't prefer rural areas.'

× I prefer umm another country because that experience is more good than viewing our country so and I can see a lot of.

✓ I prefer another country because that experience is better than seeing views in our country, and I can see a lot there.

Multiple issues here include incorrect preposition/verb choices: 'more good' is incorrect — use 'better'; 'viewing our country' is awkward — use 'seeing views in our country'; the phrase lacks an object at the end 'I can see a lot of' needs completion. This is mainly incorrect use of prepositions and word choice leading to ungrammatical phrases. Suggestion: replace 'more good' with 'better,' change 'viewing our country' to 'seeing views in our country,' and finish the clause 'I can see a lot there.'