Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, clarity and naturalness. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct verb forms and articles, and add a brief specific reason or example. Keep it under five sentences and avoid redundancy.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I love capturing interesting scenes. For example, I often photograph sunsets and city skylines to remember their colours and atmosphere.

제안: Correct word choice and phrasing, and give a clear reason with one supporting detail. Use linking words for coherence and avoid repeating phrases.

예시: I prefer views in urban areas because I enjoy the lively atmosphere and diverse architecture. For instance, I like photographing busy streets and historic buildings since they show local life and design.

제안: Fix repetition and articles, make the topic sentence direct, and add a specific supporting detail that explains why you prefer domestic views. Use one linking word to connect ideas.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because I feel connected to its landscapes and traditions. For example, I enjoy photographing local festivals and familiar countryside scenes that reflect our culture.

× Yes, I like taking picture of different views because I love captured.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I love capturing them.

The student used 'captured' incorrectly. After 'love' we need a verb in the -ing form to express a preference or enjoyment (gerund), so use 'capturing'. Also 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' to match 'different views', and add the object 'them' to refer back to 'pictures'. Suggestion: use 'love' + verb-ing for activities you enjoy and ensure noun number agrees with context.

× I prefer abuse in urban areas because many people live here in this place.

✓ I prefer urban areas because many people live in this place.

The student wrote 'abuse' instead of 'urban areas' or perhaps meant 'about' or 'urban'. This is a lexical error; grammar category here is incorrect adjective/adverb use since 'abuse' is the wrong word form. Also 'live here in this place' is redundant; 'live in this place' or 'live here' is sufficient. Suggestion: choose the correct word 'urban areas' and avoid redundancy: 'many people live here' or 'many people live in this place.'

× I prefer views in our in our country because I love my own country, the own culture and views.

✓ I prefer views in my country because I love my country, its culture, and its scenery.

The phrase 'our in our country' repeats and mixes pronouns; 'my own country' followed by 'the own culture' is ungrammatical. Use consistent possessive pronouns: 'my country' and 'its' to refer back to the country. Also 'views' is better expressed as 'scenery' here. Suggestion: remove repetition and use 'my' and 'its' for clarity: 'I prefer views in my country because I love my country, its culture, and its scenery.'