Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and natural: give a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and unclear words (e.g. “miss”), and add one specific reason or example. Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences) and use linking words for coherence.

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing natural scenery because it helps me relax and remember special places. For example, I often take pictures of lakes and forests when I go hiking, which lets me revisit those calm moments later.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repeating words, and give specific supporting details linked logically (use linking words like “because” or “for example”). Replace fillers like “uh” with a short pause if needed.

예시: I prefer rural views because they are more natural and peaceful. For example, I enjoy photographing mountains, rivers, and dense forests, which you rarely find in cities.

제안: Answer directly with a topic sentence, avoid repetition (don’t repeat words like “beautiful” multiple times), and give a specific reason or an example. Use linking phrases such as “because” or “for instance” to organize ideas.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because I’m familiar with the landscapes and have many memories there. For instance, I often visit a nearby mountain range with clear rivers and lush forests that are special to me.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of natural views because I love the natural views and miss.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of natural views because I love them and sometimes miss them.

The original sentence misuses 'the natural views and miss' causing a pronoun reference and verb omission error. Replace 'the natural views' with the pronoun 'them' to avoid repetition and add the subject 'I' before 'miss' (or use 'sometimes miss them') to form a complete clause. This fixes pronoun reference and sentence completeness. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 12)

× I prefer rural rural areas views because rural area areas views is most natural forest, mountains, rivers, uh etcetera.

✓ I prefer rural areas because they are the most natural, with forests, mountains, rivers, and so on.

The original sentence repeats words and mixes singular/plural forms (e.g., 'rural rural areas views', 'rural area areas views is') and uses 'is' with a plural subject. Use 'rural areas' (plural) and match the verb 'are' to plural subject; list examples with plural nouns and proper commas. This fixes pluralization and subject-verb agreement. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 1)

× So I love rural areas.

✓ So I love rural areas.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. It matches plural subject 'rural areas' with the verb 'love'. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 27)

× I prefer views in my own country because I born in here and I love my country because my country has many beautiful mountains, beautiful rivers, beautiful forests, forests, green.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because I was born here, and I love my country because it has many beautiful mountains, rivers, and green forests.

The original contains a missing auxiliary verb ('was born'), an unnecessary preposition ('in here' should be 'here'), repetition ('forests, forests'), and awkward phrasing. Use the past passive 'was born' and the pronoun 'it' to refer to 'my country', and streamline the list of features with correct nouns and adjectives. This fixes pronoun reference, verb form, and redundancy. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 12)