Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문장 구성과 발음이 불명확하고 많은 중복 어휘가 사용되었습니다. 먼저 질문에 바로 답하는 주제문을 만들고 그 다음에 한두 개의 구체적 이유나 예시를 연결하세요. 불필요한 반복(예: "I always", "when I go")을 줄이고, 연결어(for example, because)를 사용해 말의 흐름을 자연스럽게 하세요. 또한 대명사(we/them/it)를 정확히 사용하고 소리를 더 명확히 발음하도록 연습하세요.

예시: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing different views because it helps me remember trips. For example, when I visit a city I often take photos of the skyline, and in nature I focus on landscapes to capture the atmosphere.

제안: 답변이 모호하고 비문(예: "Franklin's baking")과 반복이 포함되어 이해가 어렵습니다. 먼저 명확한 주제문으로 선호(urban or rural)를 밝히고, 그 이유를 1–2개의 구체적 근거로 연결하세요. 연결어(so, because, therefore)를 적절히 사용하고 형용사(collocated phrases like "calm atmosphere")를 정확히 표현하세요. 문장 길이는 1–3문장으로 유지하세요.

예시: I prefer rural views. I like the peace and quiet of the countryside, which lets me relax and focus on details like fields and small villages rather than busy city scenes.

제안: 의미 전달은 가능하지만 문법과 표현이 어색합니다("Beau for a little country" 등). 먼저 명확한 주제문으로 답을 밝히고, 이유를 구체적으로 제시하세요. 예를 들어 다른 나라의 문화·역사에 대한 관심을 말할 때는 구체적 예시(foods, monuments)를 들면 좋습니다. 문장 끝의 표현은 능동태로 정리하세요.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy learning about different cultures and histories. For instance, I like photographing historic buildings and local markets when I travel abroad.

× Uh, yeah, definitely, uh, because I, when I go, when I go there, uh, to trip, I always, I always enjoy taking a picture of us, of, of them. Umm.

✓ Yes, definitely. When I go on a trip, I always enjoy taking pictures of the views.

The original sentence has multiple disfluencies and unclear pronoun reference ('us'/'them') and incorrect preposition 'to trip'. This is a sentence structure error (26). Suggestions: remove filler words (uh, um), combine clauses clearly ('When I go on a trip'), use the correct preposition 'on a trip', use plural 'pictures' for general habit, and replace unclear object with 'the views' to match the question context.

× Uh, Franklin's baking, uh, I prefer a little area because, uh, I like, I like quiet, I prefer quiet and calm atmosphere than, uh, active, so because.

✓ I prefer rural areas because I like quiet, calm atmospheres more than busy ones.

Problems include incorrect or missing prepositions and comparative structure; 'a little area' and 'than active' are incorrect. This fits 'Incorrect use of prepositions' (11) and sentence structure issues. Suggestions: use 'rural areas' for 'little area', pluralize 'atmospheres' to match count, use comparative structure 'more than busy ones', and remove fillers.

× I prefer, uh, I prefer Beau for a little country because I really like, uh, other culture and history. So it's really curious about other country.

✓ I prefer visiting smaller countries because I really like other cultures and their histories, so I am curious about other countries.

Errors include wrong word choice ('Beau'), incorrect prepositions, singular/plural mismatches ('other culture', 'other country'), and unclear subject in 'it's really curious'. This is categorized as 'Incorrect use of prepositions' (11) and also article/plural errors. Suggestions: use 'visiting', pluralize 'cultures' and 'histories', use 'curious about other countries', and make the subject 'I am curious' rather than 'it's'.