Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant and shows enthusiasm, but it has some grammar mistakes, a spelling error, an unfinished sentence and some redundancy. To improve, correct vocabulary (e.g. 'photographs' not 'photographies'), use complete sentences, avoid repetition, and add one specific detail about your photography practice. Keep the response to a maximum of 4–5 concise sentences and use a linking word to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I do. I especially enjoy taking photographs of landscapes in spring because the colours are vivid and the light is soft. For example, when I travel I take shots to record the trip and experiment with framing to create more interesting compositions. Moreover, this practice helps me improve my camera skills, such as adjusting exposure and composition.

제안: The answer is clear and coherent but has a minor grammar error ('can helps' → 'can help') and could be expanded with a specific reason or example. Use a linking word to connect your preference with the reason and add one concise supporting detail (for instance, a favourite rural place or an activity you do there).

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because the peaceful countryside helps me relax and think more clearly. For example, I often go to a nearby village where I walk along quiet lanes and take photos of fields, which gives me time to plan my studies and future goals.

제안: This answer is natural and well-focused, but you can improve it by using tighter phrasing and adding one specific example to make it more vivid (for example, a particular coastal city or a feature you like). Also change 'fresh and clean air which can make me relax' to a more concise phrase with a linking word.

예시: I prefer views in other countries, especially coastal cities, because I enjoy the sea views and the fresh air. For instance, I loved walking along the promenade in Lisbon last year; the sea breeze and colourful architecture helped me unwind and inspired my photography.

× I especially like taking photographies of different views in spring or when I travel because it helps me record the trip and capture the precious moment.

✓ I especially like taking photographs of different views in spring or when I travel because they help me record trips and capture precious moments.

The noun 'photographies' is not standard in English; the correct plural is 'photographs' (Grammar Problem Type ID 1). Also 'it helps me record the trip and capture the precious moment' contains singular references that do not agree with the plural activity. Changing to 'they help me record trips and capture precious moments' fixes number agreement and sounds natural. Grammar problem type ID: 1

× Most importantly, it can practice my photography skills such as framing and.

✓ Most importantly, it can help me practise my photography skills, such as framing.

'It can practice my photography skills' is ungrammatical because 'practice' is normally transitive with a person as the subject who practises, or the verb 'help' should be used (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). Also the sentence ends abruptly with 'and.' Removing the trailing conjunction and using 'help me practise' (British spelling 'practise' as a verb) produces a complete and correct sentence. Ensure the verb properly takes the person as object: 'help me practise my skills.' Grammar problem type ID: 26

× The peaceful countryside scenery can helps me relax and give me the time and place to prepare for my future.

✓ The peaceful countryside scenery can help me relax and give me the time and space to prepare for my future.

Modal 'can' must be followed by the base form of the verb, so 'helps' is incorrect after 'can' (Grammar Problem Type ID 2 and 27). Use 'help'. Also 'place' is acceptable but 'space' is more idiomatic with 'time', so 'time and space' fits better. This corrects subject-verb/modal agreement and improves naturalness. Grammar problem type ID: 2

× To be honest, I prefer views in other countries, especially the coastal cities, because I really like the landscape and the fresh and clean air which can make me relax.

✓ To be honest, I prefer views in other countries, especially coastal cities, because I really like the landscape and the fresh, clean air that helps me relax.

Use of 'the' before 'coastal cities' is unnecessary when speaking generally; omit it for natural expression (Grammar Problem Type ID 22). Also 'fresh and clean air' is better expressed as 'fresh, clean air' (punctuation/adjective order) and 'which can make me relax' is awkward: use 'that helps me relax' which is more natural and uses the correct verb form to indicate effect (Grammar Problem Type ID 13 and 6). This fixes article use and improves adjective/adverb choice and clause clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 22