Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Keep your answer concise and directly relevant. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (e.g., "uh"), and give one specific reason with a brief example. Use linking words like "because" or "for example" correctly and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me preserve memories. For example, when I travel I photograph city skylines and sunsets so I can look back and remember the places I visited.

제안: Begin with a clear preference statement, then give two concise, specific reasons using linking words like "because" and "however." Avoid grammatical errors (articles, plurals) and repetition. Mention specific urban features (skylines, architecture, lighting) and avoid vague negative generalizations about rural areas.

예시: I prefer views in urban areas because modern architecture and colourful city lights create striking scenes. For example, I enjoy photographing skyline silhouettes and busy streets, whereas rural views often lack the dramatic contrasts I like.

제안: State your preference briefly and give clear, balanced reasons without broad negative statements about your country. Use correct grammar (verb forms, articles, singular/plural) and provide a specific example of a foreign place you like. Try to include a positive comparison instead of only criticizing your country.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because I have noticed cleaner streets and well-maintained public spaces in some cities I've visited. For instance, when I visited Singapore I admired the tidy parks and modern waterfront, which made photographing there very enjoyable.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I love to capture memories and because when I was going outside, uh, I clicked pictures because.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I love to capture memories and when I go outside I take pictures because it is memorable.

The original mixes past and present tenses incorrectly ('when I was going outside' and 'I clicked pictures') while the general habit is present tense. Use simple present for habitual actions: 'when I go outside I take pictures'. Also remove filler 'uh' and duplicate 'because'. Ensure sentence flow by adding 'it is memorable' to complete the idea.

× It is memorable.

✓ They are memorable.

The pronoun 'it' is unclear because the noun referred to ('pictures' or 'memories') is plural. Use 'they are memorable' to agree with 'pictures' or 'memories'. This fixes sentence structure and reference clarity.

× I prefer views in urban areas because in urban areas there is a many buildings which is so beautiful and the the city was so clean and looking so beautiful whereas in rural areas there is a lot of garbages and and the.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because there are many buildings which are very beautiful, and the city is clean and looks attractive, whereas in rural areas there is a lot of garbage.

Errors: 'there is a many buildings' uses singular 'is' with plural 'buildings' and incorrect quantifier 'a many'. Use 'there are many buildings'. 'Which is so beautiful' must agree with plural subject: 'which are very beautiful'. 'The city was so clean and looking so beautiful' mixes past and present; use present 'is' for general preference. 'Garbages' is uncountable; use 'garbage'. Remove trailing incomplete phrase. Improved word choice: 'very beautiful' and 'looks attractive' for natural expression.

× I prefer views in other countries because the rural and urban areas are have been seen very clear and beautiful whereas in India the both both rural and area urban areas was was full of garbages and not so clean and there is a lot.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because the rural and urban areas there are very clean and beautiful, whereas in India both rural and urban areas are often full of garbage and not very clean.

Multiple errors: 'are have been seen' is an incorrect verb sequence; use simple present 'are' for general statements. 'Very clear' is odd for places; use 'very clean and beautiful'. Remove duplicated words 'both both' and 'was was'. Use plural agreement 'areas are' not 'was'. 'Garbages' is incorrect—'garbage' is uncountable. 'There is a lot' is incomplete; replace with 'are often full of garbage'. The correction keeps present tense to describe general conditions.