Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Улучшите грамматику и беглость, уменьшите повторения и стройте ответ с одной основной мыслью и 1–2 поддерживающими деталями. Начните с прямого утверждения (тематического предложения), затем приведите причины с связками (for example, because, so). Избегайте лишних повторов («I just», «moments» дважды) и исправьте формы глаголов (например, «I love capturing the moment»).

예시: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views. I enjoy photography because it helps me remember special moments and makes me feel more alive. For example, when I capture a sunset, I can revisit that feeling later and share it with friends.

제안: Сделайте ответ более структурированным: дайте явный выбор (или объясните, что предпочитаете оба) и подкрепите его 1–2 конкретными причинами с связками (because, however, for example). Уберите словесные наполнители («uh», «like the same for me») и исправьте фразы («good for taking moments» → «good for taking photos»).

예시: I don't have a strong preference because I enjoy both urban and rural views. Urban scenes are great for interesting architecture and street life, while rural areas offer peaceful landscapes and natural light, so I like to photograph both.

제안: Сформулируйте причину выбора ясно и грамматически правильно: начните с прямого утверждения, затем объясните, почему (because, so) и приведите пример или эффект. Избегайте разговорных сокращений («wanna») и повторов («would would»).

예시: I prefer views in other countries because traveling gives me new perspectives and inspiration. For example, seeing different landscapes and cultures helps me take more diverse photos and learn new techniques.

× It's my favorite question. Sure. I like because when I take a picture, I feel that I am living and I just I just love take the moment and enjoy the moments and when I take picture, it's like for me, memories.

✓ It's my favorite topic. Sure. I like taking pictures because when I take a picture I feel alive, and I just love capturing and enjoying the moment, and when I take a picture it becomes a memory for me.

The sentence has several structure problems: incorrect collocations ('favorite question' -> 'favorite topic'), missing gerund after 'like' and 'love' (use 'taking' and 'capturing'), duplicated words ('I just I just'), missing articles ('take picture' -> 'take a picture'), and awkward phrasing ('it's like for me, memories' -> 'it becomes a memory for me'). Suggestion: break into shorter clauses, use correct verb forms (gerunds after like/love), include necessary articles, and choose natural collocations.

× I prefer both because uh, urban areas and rural areas like the same for me and there are really pretty and good for taking moments and just feel the life. So yes.

✓ I prefer both because urban and rural areas are the same to me; they are both really pretty and good for taking photos and for experiencing life.

Problems include wrong use of 'like' instead of a linking verb, incorrect pronoun/reference ('there are really pretty' should refer to areas), and unnatural phrase 'taking moments' and 'feel the life'. Suggestion: use 'are the same to me', use plural verb agreement 'they are', replace 'taking moments' with 'taking photos' and 'feel the life' with 'experiencing life' for natural meaning.

× I prefer views in another country. Yes my own country is the same, also has a good views, but I wanna try something new and I prefer in other countries because it would would for me really interesting experience.

✓ I prefer views in other countries. My own country is the same and also has good views, but I want to try something new and I prefer other countries because it would be a really interesting experience for me.

Errors: incorrect article use ('a good views' -> 'good views'), incorrect singular/plural and determiner ('another country' vs 'other countries' to match meaning), colloquial 'wanna' should be 'want to', duplicated word 'would would', missing 'be' in 'would be', missing article 'a' before 'really interesting experience', and wrong word order 'for me' placement. Suggestion: use 'other countries' when speaking generally, avoid informal 'wanna', ensure verbs and auxiliaries are complete ('would be'), include articles where needed and place 'for me' naturally at sentence end.