Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct minor grammatical errors; start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting reasons using linking words. Avoid filler sounds like "umm" and correct tense/number errors (e.g. "I usually forget").

예시: Not really. I prefer to enjoy the moment rather than take photos because stopping to set up shots feels like a hassle, and I often forget to take pictures anyway. However, if a view is extraordinary, I might take a quick photo to remember it.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence stating your general preference or neutrality, then use linking words and specific examples. Correct small errors ("tall build buildings" → "tall buildings"; avoid repeating words). Keep within 3–4 sentences.

예시: It depends, but I usually lean towards rural views for their tranquility. That said, cityscapes can be exciting because of tall buildings, neon lights and bustling streets. Overall, both types of scenery have their own unique beauty.

제안: State your preference clearly, avoid repetition and minor grammar mistakes ("of my country of my country", "architectures" → "architecture"). Provide a specific reason and an example, using linking words like "because" or "for example."

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they often offer different architectural styles and landscapes that I don't see at home. For example, when I visited Lisbon I was fascinated by the colourful tiles and winding streets, which felt refreshingly different from the familiar scenery back home.

× I prefer to just enjoy the moment and I also find it a bit of a hassle to stop and take pictures and usually I forgot to anyway.

✓ I prefer to just enjoy the moment, and I also find it a bit of a hassle to stop and take pictures, and usually I forget to anyway.

The verb 'forgot' is past tense while the surrounding present-tense context ('prefer', 'find') requires present tense. This is a tense consistency error that affects subject-verb agreement over time; change 'forgot' to 'forget' to match present habitual meaning. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions (usually + base verb).

× Well it depends, sometimes I find city views interesting like the tall build buildings and bright lights, but other times I I just want to feel the calm of the countryside.

✓ Well, it depends. Sometimes I find city views interesting, like the tall buildings and bright lights, but other times I just want to feel the calm of the countryside.

Multiple issues: punctuation and repetition aside, 'tall build buildings' is ungrammatical; the correct plural noun is 'buildings' with adjective 'tall'. Also 'depends' and 'find' are present tense and correct; fix the phrase to 'tall buildings'. Remove duplicate 'I'. Suggestion: use adjective + noun order (tall buildings) and proofread for duplicated words and punctuation.

× But both scenery have their own unique beauty.

✓ But both sceneries have their own unique beauty.

The word 'scenery' is an uncountable noun and cannot take 'both' directly. If referring to two kinds/places, use the plural countable form 'sceneries' or rephrase as 'both scenes' or 'both types of scenery'. Suggestion: when referring to two distinct sets of views, use a plural countable noun like 'sceneries' or rephrase to 'both types of scenery'.

× Other countries I generally prefer the landscapes of other countries, but maybe it's because I'm already used to the views of this country of my country.

✓ I generally prefer the landscapes of other countries, but maybe it's because I'm already used to the views of my own country.

The original sentence is repetitive and has poor word order ('Other countries I generally prefer...' and 'this country of my country'). Rearranging to subject-first ('I generally prefer...') and replacing 'this country of my country' with 'my own country' corrects grammar and clarity. Suggestion: avoid repetition and use clear possessive forms ('my own country').

× So whenever I travel abroad, I love seeing the different styles of architectures and it's very unique and stunning.

✓ So whenever I travel abroad, I love seeing the different styles of architecture; they're very unique and stunning.

'Architectures' is not normally used in plural when referring to architectural styles; use the uncountable noun 'architecture' or 'styles of architecture'. Also 'it's' (singular) does not agree with the plural idea 'styles'; change to 'they're' or rephrase. Suggestion: use 'styles of architecture' and match verb number ('they're') to plural subject or rephrase to 'which are').