Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and avoid repetition. Use one or two supporting details with linking words and correct grammar. Keep answers concise (max 3–4 short sentences) and use varied vocabulary such as “perspectives,” “scenes,” or “landscapes.” Fix tense and article errors and remove duplicated phrases.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photography lets me explore new perspectives. For example, I often photograph cityscapes and close-up details to capture interesting shapes and lighting. This helps me notice things I would otherwise miss.

제안: Start with a direct statement of preference, then give 1–2 specific reasons using linking words (e.g., because, therefore, for example). Use precise vocabulary (e.g., ‘better lighting,’ ‘interesting architecture’) and correct collocations (e.g., “take photos” not “take pics,” “comfortable” not “comfortability”). Keep sentences shorter to avoid repetition.

예시: I prefer urban views because cities usually offer better lighting and more interesting architecture. For example, streetlights and shop windows create dramatic scenes at night, so I can capture clearer and more dynamic photos.

제안: Answer directly and avoid contradicting statements. Explain reasons briefly and give a specific example or future intention. Correct grammar (e.g., “I have never been to another country,” “If possible,” “I have found”). Use linking words such as “because” and “however” to make your response coherent.

예시: At the moment, I prefer photographing views in my own country because I have never been abroad and I know many scenic spots here. However, if I travel in the future, I would love to photograph new places abroad to discover different cultures and landscapes.

× Like taking pictures of different views, I like to explore things.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views because I enjoy exploring new things.

Original sentence misuses the introductory phrase 'Like taking pictures of different views' which creates an unclear connection and awkward structure. Rewriting with 'because' clarifies the reason and produces a natural word order: subject + verb + object + reason. Use 'enjoy exploring' to express intention smoothly.

× Whenever I take pictures in different views it it opens a ways to explore things as possible.

✓ Whenever I take pictures from different viewpoints, it opens up ways to explore things.

Problems: repeated word 'it it', incorrect phrase 'in different views', and ungrammatical 'a ways' and 'as possible'. Use 'from different viewpoints' and 'opens up ways' for correct preposition and noun forms. Remove unnecessary words to make the sentence concise and grammatical.

× That's why I always choose to take pictures different manner.

✓ That's why I always choose to take pictures in different ways.

Missing preposition and incorrect noun form: 'take pictures different manner' is ungrammatical. Use 'in different ways' (plural 'ways' and preposition 'in') to express manner correctly.

× I always prefer views in urban areas compared to rural areas because whenever I take pictures in urban areas, there will be more light possible compared to rural because for taking pics, lights are more important and it can give the comfortability to capture beautiful and visually excellent pictures.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas to those in rural areas because there is usually more light in cities, and light is important for taking pictures and capturing beautiful, visually appealing images.

Several issues: use 'prefer A to B' not 'prefer A compared to B' (comparison structure). 'There will be more light possible compared to rural' is awkward — use 'there is usually more light in cities.' 'Comfortability' is a nonstandard word; use 'comfort' or omit it. 'Visually excellent' is awkward; 'visually appealing' is natural. Also simplify redundant clauses for clarity.

× If it possible, I will take pictures in another country.

✓ If it is possible, I will take pictures in another country.

Missing auxiliary 'is' after 'it' in the conditional clause. Conditional 'If it is possible' requires the verb 'is' to be grammatical. This is a simple present conditional forming a future intention.

× Until now I taking pictures in my country is very sufficient for me and I like that very much.

✓ So far, taking pictures in my country has been sufficient for me, and I like it very much.

Original has incorrect verb form 'I taking' and wrong tense/aspect. Use present perfect 'has been' with 'so far' to indicate experience up to now. Replace 'that' with 'it' referring to the activity. Structure: subject + helping verb + past participle for present perfect; gerund phrase 'taking pictures' functions as subject.

× But I like to explore things in a new country.

✓ However, I would like to explore places in a new country.

'But' at the start is acceptable but 'I like to explore things' is vague; 'would like' better matches conditional desire and 'places' is more natural than 'things' when referring to locations. This improves register and clarity.

× If it possible, I will take pictures in another country.

✓ If possible, I will take pictures in another country.

Alternative concise correction: drop 'it' and use 'If possible' which is idiomatic. This avoids repetition and remains grammatically correct for expressing future intention.