Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more direct and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and keep it concise (no more than 4–5 sentences). Add a specific reason and an example using linking words (for example, because/so/therefore). Also correct tense and article errors.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I love exploring new places. For example, when I visit a park or a city centre, I feel curious and energetic, so I take photos of interesting buildings and landscapes. This helps me remember the place and share it with friends.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then support it with specific reasons and avoid vague or repetitive phrases. Use linking words (for example, because/while/however) and correct grammar (plural/singular, word order). Limit to 3–4 sentences.

예시: I prefer views in urban areas because I enjoy the city architecture and lively streets. For instance, modern buildings and historic monuments often have interesting designs that I like to photograph. While rural landscapes can be peaceful, I find urban scenes more visually stimulating.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and give a specific reason. Correct grammar (use present perfect for experiences, singular/plural agreement) and add a brief example or prediction. Keep it concise and coherent using linking words (because/so).

예시: I prefer views in my own country because I have not travelled abroad yet, so I know its landscapes and culture better. For example, I enjoy photographing local festivals and traditional architecture, which are familiar and easy to access.

× Taking pictures of different views because I like to explore very much.

✓ I take pictures of different views because I like to explore a lot.

Original sentence lacks a main verb and proper subject-verb structure, making it a sentence fragment (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). Use a subject and finite verb 'I take' to form a complete sentence and replace 'very much' with the more natural 'a lot' for this context.

× Whenever I explore very much, I become very curious and energetic.

✓ Whenever I explore, I become very curious and energetic.

The phrase 'explore very much' is unnatural and redundant. This is a present tense usage issue (ID 6). Removing 'very much' makes the sentence natural while keeping the present tense 'explore' and 'become' consistent with habitual actions.

× That's why I I choose for taking pictures in different years.

✓ That's why I choose to take pictures every year.

Errors include repeated word 'I', incorrect use of 'for' before an -ing form, and an awkward time expression. This involves incorrect use of verb+ -ing and sentence structure (ID 8 and 26). Use the infinitive 'to take' after 'choose' and replace 'in different years' with 'every year' for clarity.

× I always prefer views in urban areas because city structure and buildings are very beautiful by views.

✓ I always prefer views in urban areas because the city structures and buildings are very beautiful to look at.

The phrase 'beautiful by views' is incorrect English and mixes noun and prepositional use (ID 13). Add the definite article 'the' for specificity (article error related) and use 'to look at' to express that they are pleasant to view.

× That's why, uh, when we compare to rural areas, there are places like agricultural lands.

✓ That's why, when we compare them to rural areas, there are places such as agricultural land.

The phrase 'compare to rural areas' lacks an object; use 'compare them to' to make the comparison clear. Also 'agricultural lands' is better as 'agricultural land' or 'farmland' (ID 11). Replace 'like' with 'such as' for formal clarity.

× It was not very beautiful as much as buildings in cities.

✓ They are not as beautiful as the buildings in cities.

This sentence mixes past tense 'was' with a general present comparison; it should use present tense for a general statement (ID 5 and 6). Also correct comparative structure to 'not as ... as' and ensure the subject 'they' (referring to rural places) agrees with the verb.

× That's why I choose.

✓ That's why I choose urban views.

Single short sentence lacks clarity because 'choose' needs an object to be meaningful (ID 26). Adding 'urban views' completes the idea and ties it to the prior explanation.

× I prefer views in my own country because I never been in other countries even till now.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because I have never been to other countries until now.

Original uses incorrect verb form 'never been' without auxiliary and wrong preposition 'in' (ID 6 and 11). Use present perfect 'have never been' for life experience up to now and the preposition 'to' with 'been'.

× I know the different kind of views and other things in my own countries that's why.

✓ I know the different kinds of views and other things in my own country; that's why.

Errors include singular/plural mismatch 'different kind' vs 'kinds' and 'countries' vs 'country' (ID 1 and 14). Use 'kinds' with plural noun 'views' and keep 'my own country' to match earlier singular reference. Add punctuation to join clauses clearly.