Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 答案自然，但有重复和语法错误，句子较多且有冗余。提高建议：1) 开头直接给主题句，省去“actually”。2) 减少重复（如“come, when I come come back”）。3) 改进语法（时态和冠词），例如“when I come back home, I look at these pictures and they remind me of the memories”。4) 控制长度在3-4句，使用连接词如“so”或“which”使句子连贯。

예시: Yes, I love taking photos of different views. I often travel with my own camera and photograph landscapes, especially during trips. When I return home, I look at these pictures which remind me of the memories and moments I had.

제안: 答案表达清楚但有语法和用词问题，且有冗长表达。提高建议：1) 用更地道的短语，如“I live in a big city”而不是“I'm now living”。2) 修正时态和习惯用法（例如“I see tall buildings every day”和“on weekends I like to go to the countryside”）。3) 使用连接词“because”后跟具体原因并简洁说明个人偏好。4) 注意单复数和词搭配（natural scenery 而不是 natural sceneries）。

예시: I prefer rural areas because I live in a big city and see tall buildings every day. On weekends I often go to the countryside to photograph natural scenery, which feels more peaceful and varied than city views.

제안: 回答内容完整但表达混乱、有重复且语法错误多。提高建议：1) 直接给出结论（e.g. “I like both”），随后用两三句分别说明原因。2) 避免重复词（“complete completely”），注意词序和冠词（“the world”，“many varieties of scenery”）。3) 使用更精确的词汇（“scenery”通常不可数）。4) 保持句子简洁并用连接词如“however”或“also”衔接。

예시: I like views in both my country and abroad. China has a huge variety of scenery, from mountains to coastlines, which I enjoy photographing. At the same time, visiting other countries gives me completely different landscapes and cultural scenes, so I appreciate both.

× Actually, I enjoy taking photos of views very much.

✓ Actually, I enjoy taking photos of views very much.

该句无错误。动词 enjoy 后接动名词 taking 使用正确。保持不变。

× I also have my own camera.

✓ I also have my own camera.

该句结构正确，表达清晰，无需修改。

× I enjoy traveling and I take a lot of photos of the landscapes during my traveling.

✓ I enjoy traveling and I take a lot of photos of landscapes when I travel.

原句中“during my traveling”在此处用法冗长且不自然。将其改为“when I travel”更符合日常表达；去掉定冠词 the，因泛指风景不需要定冠词。时态保持一般现在时，以表示习惯性动作。

× And when I come, when I come come back to home, I look these pictures.

✓ And when I come back home, I look at these pictures.

问题包括多余的重复“when I come, when I come”，介词用法错误（应为 'come back home' 或 'come home'，不能说 'back to home'），以及动词 look 需要宾语短语 'look at'。将重复删除并使用正确的介词短语和动词搭配。

× It reminded me of those memories.

✓ They remind me of those memories.

上下文在描述习惯性动作（看照片会唤起记忆），应使用一般现在时 'remind' 而不是过去时 'reminded'。主语应与前句的 'these pictures' 对应，使用复数 'They' 更清晰。

× Well I would say I prefer rural areas because I'm now living in a big city.

✓ Well, I would say I prefer rural areas because I'm currently living in a big city.

原句主要是标点和词序问题。将 'now' 改为 'currently' 更正式；在 'Well,' 后加逗号使语流更自然。语法本身正确。

× I almost watch the tall buildings and high towers every day.

✓ I see the tall buildings and high towers every day.

使用 'watch' 不合适，watch 通常指有意观看或观看动态事物；这里描述日常可见的景物应使用 'see'。'almost' 放置不当，删除以保持意思（几乎每天可见的话可用 'almost every day'）。

× So when I was on weekend I like to travel to countryside and take a lot of photos of the natural sceneries instead of the skyscrapers in the city.

✓ So on weekends I like to travel to the countryside and take a lot of photos of natural scenery instead of the skyscrapers in the city.

问题包括时态和习惯表达：'was on weekend' 不自然，应改为 'on weekends'（表示习惯性动作）；'travel to countryside' 需加定冠词 'the countryside'；'sceneries' 不可数名词，改为 'scenery'；整体改为一般现在时 'like to travel' 与习惯性动作一致。

× I love all of the beautiful sceneries on the world because I'm now live in China and everyone knows that China has almost every have varieties of beautiful sceneries and the landscapes and sometimes I travel to other countries and that's a complete completely new scenery for me and I have new experience.

✓ I love all the beautiful scenery in the world because I now live in China, and everyone knows that China has many varieties of beautiful scenery and landscapes. Sometimes I travel to other countries and that's a completely new experience for me.

原句问题多：'sceneries' 应为不可数名词 'scenery'；介词应为 'in the world' 而不是 'on the world'；'I'm now live' 语法错误，应为 'I now live' 或 'I'm now living'；'almost every have varieties' 语序混乱且多余，改为 'many varieties'；'redundant wording' 如 'complete completely' 删除重复并用 'completely new experience' 更自然；'a completely new scenery' 改为 'a completely new experience' 更符合语义。保持一般现在时描述习惯与现在状态。

× So I love both views.

✓ So I love both kinds of views.

原句可理解但略显模糊。加上 'kinds of' 更清楚地表示喜欢两种类型的景色（本国和他国或城市和乡村）。