Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and avoid repetition. Add one supporting detail with a linking word and a specific example. Keep answers to no more than 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me remember places and moments. For example, I often photograph sunsets at the beach and then share them with friends on social media so we can relive those memories together.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, remove filler words, and use linking words to contrast urban and rural views. Provide a specific reason or brief example to support your preference. Limit to 2–3 sentences for clarity.

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because they offer open landscapes and natural scenery. For example, farms and fields allow me to enjoy unobstructed sunsets, unlike cities where tall buildings block the horizon.

제안: Organize your answer: state your preference then compare specific features of each country using linking words (e.g., however, whereas). Correct vocabulary (e.g., 'both') and grammar, and avoid hesitation. Give one clear comparative example.

예시: I enjoy views both in my home country and abroad because each offers something different. For instance, in Punjab I loved watching sunsets over farmland, whereas in Canada I enjoy coastal sunsets and snowy landscapes, so both are special for different reasons.

× Yes, I really like the taking the picture because it helps us to Remember Me, the places and the views and also I really like to share pictures with my friends on social media and this is the best way to memorize the special views and moments.

✓ Yes, I really like taking pictures because they help me remember the places and the views. I also like to share pictures with my friends on social media; this is a good way to remember special views and moments.

Errors: unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'taking' and 'picture'; incorrect pronoun and capitalization 'Remember Me'; unclear plural agreement. Suggestions: Remove 'the' before gerund and use plural 'pictures'. Use 'they help me remember' instead of 'it helps us to Remember Me'. Use consistent lowercase and correct pronouns: 'me' not 'Me'. Split into two sentences for clarity.

× Well, I really prefer the views in rural areas because in urban areas we have, uh, long tall buildings and due to that buildings, they, uh, they just broke the views and, uh, but in rural areas you can see the natural view and enjoy.

✓ Well, I prefer views in rural areas because in urban areas we have tall buildings that block the view. In rural areas you can see natural scenery and enjoy it.

Errors: phrase 'due to that buildings' is incorrect preposition and article use; 'broke the views' uses wrong verb tense and meaning. Suggestions: Use 'that' to introduce a clause describing buildings, use 'block the view' to express obstruction, and use 'scenery' or 'the natural view' with 'enjoy it'. Remove filler words.

× Actually, I prefer the boot like I was living in a Punjab, India and there was a different view.

✓ Actually, I prefer both. I used to live in Punjab, India, and the views there were different.

Errors: 'boot' is a misspelling of 'both'; incorrect article 'a Punjab' should be 'Punjab' or 'the Punjab' depending on style; tense and verb form 'I was living' is awkward here. Suggestions: Use 'both' for contrast. Use 'I used to live in Punjab, India' for past habitual residence and 'the views there were different' for past description.

× Like in the evening we can enjoy the sunset in the farms and, but in Canada we have different view and I really like this, uh, because there is, we have sunset view with the beaches and also with the snow, so.

✓ In the evenings we could enjoy sunsets on the farms, but in Canada the views are different. I really like them because we have sunsets over the beaches and also over snowy landscapes.

Errors: inconsistent tense and number ('in the evening' vs 'we can enjoy' vs 'sunset' singular). Awkward phrasing 'there is, we have sunset view with the beaches and also with the snow'. Suggestions: Use plural 'evenings' and 'sunsets' or say 'the sunset' consistently. Use 'could' or 'were able to' for past habitual enjoyment. Use 'sunsets over the beaches' and 'snowy landscapes' for clear images.