Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clearer and more coherent: answer the question directly with a concise topic sentence, avoid filled pauses and unclear words, and give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Focus on what kinds of views you like and why. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., "landscapes", "scenery") and avoid irrelevant or unclear phrases.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of different views, especially landscapes. For example, I often photograph mountains and rivers because their colors and shapes make me feel calm and inspired. When Im sad, taking photos helps me relax and reflect, so I try to capture interesting patterns of light and shadow.

제안: Give a clear direct preference and provide specific reasons and examples with correct vocabulary. Avoid vague or incorrect phrases ("phenomenon of hurting animals" is unclear). Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas and keep answers concise (max 5 sentences).

예시: I prefer rural views to urban ones because the countryside offers more natural variety and peaceful scenes. For instance, I like photographing fields, herds of grazing animals, and traditional villages because they show authentic daily life and beautiful light at sunrise. This calm atmosphere helps me compose more meaningful images.

제안: State your preference directly and support it with specific, well-formed reasons. Avoid fillers and ungrammatical phrases; use precise descriptions of what you like about your country (e.g., "diverse landscapes", "unique cultural festivals"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and include linking words like "because" or "for example."

예시: I prefer photographing views in my own country because it has very diverse and beautiful landscapes, from mountains to coastal areas. For example, I enjoy capturing local festivals and traditional markets as they show unique colors and activities that I know well and can represent authentically.

× Of course I would like to uh, take a photo of umm, letters, especially letters and attacking photo of different features.

✓ Of course I would like to take photos of landscapes, especially letters and aerial photos of different features.

The original sentence has unclear pronoun references and awkward phrasing. 'Take a photo' is changed to 'take photos' to match habitual preference (plural). 'Attacking photo' seems to be a miswording; likely intended 'aerial photo' or 'a photo taken from above' so corrected to 'aerial photos'. Remove filler sounds and redundant commas. Suggestion: avoid filler words and be specific with nouns.

× Uh, gives me interesting feelings, like when I am sad I like to uh some.

✓ They give me interesting feelings; for example, when I am sad I like to look at them.

The original fragment 'Uh, gives me interesting feelings' lacks a clear subject (sentence without a verb/subject-verb agreement). 'I like to uh some' is incomplete. Correction adds a clear subject 'They' referring to photos, uses a complete clause and a clear verb 'look at them'. Suggestion: ensure each sentence has a subject and verb and finish intended actions.

× In comparison to urban areas, uh, in rural areas, there are some extraordinary views.

✓ Compared with urban areas, rural areas have some extraordinary views.

'In comparison to' is wordy and 'in rural areas, there are' is awkward. 'Compared with' is more natural; use active structure 'rural areas have' instead of 'there are' to be concise. Suggestion: prefer active verbs and shorter comparison phrases.

× And so I prioritize to take a photo of some rural areas such as herding animals, phenomenon of hurting animals.

✓ So I prefer to take photos of rural scenes, such as herding animals and natural phenomena involving animals.

'Prioritize to take' is incorrect collocation; use 'prefer to' or 'prioritize taking'. Also 'photo of some rural areas such as herding animals' is ungrammatical; 'rural scenes' fits. 'Phenomenon of hurting animals' is unclear and likely incorrect; changed to 'natural phenomena involving animals'. Suggestion: use correct verb patterns (prefer to do; prioritize doing) and choose clear noun phrases.

× As honestly, I uh, prefer to uh, take a picture of my own country in comparison to other countries, my country is uh reaching very too of beautiful nature's views and some other interesting activities such as not.

✓ Honestly, I prefer to take pictures of my own country rather than other countries because my country has many very beautiful natural views and interesting activities.

The original has misplaced 'as', redundant fillers, and incorrect comparative phrasing. 'In comparison to other countries' should be 'rather than other countries'. 'Reaching very too of beautiful nature's views' is ungrammatical; corrected to 'has many very beautiful natural views'. Removed 'such as not' which is meaningless. Suggestion: avoid fillers, use 'rather than' for preference comparisons, and use clear adjective-noun order ('beautiful natural views').