Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases (e.g., “peas after them”). Use varied vocabulary (e.g., “atmosphere,” “scenery”).

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. For example, I often take photos of sunsets and rainy scenes because I like the atmosphere and the dramatic colors they create. I also enjoy mountain and beach landscapes, since mountains feel peaceful and beaches offer wide open horizons.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence then two succinct, specific reasons linked with connectors (e.g., “because,” “while,” “whereas”). Correct grammar (peace → peace/peaceful) and avoid vague phrases like “not really a good looking.”

예시: I prefer rural views to urban ones because rural areas offer wide open landscapes and a lot of natural beauty. While cities are dominated by buildings and infrastructure, the countryside is quieter and more peaceful, which makes it more relaxing to photograph.

제안: Avoid fillers and vague negative comments about your country. Start with a direct answer, then give balanced, specific reasons and an example. Use comparative language correctly (e.g., “more varied scenery,” “fewer attractions”), and mention one specific place or feature to support your point.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they often offer more varied scenery. For instance, countries like Switzerland and Canada have dramatic mountains and lakes that I find inspiring, while my country has fewer renowned tourist landscapes. However, I also appreciate small local spots at home when I can find them.

× I do like taking pictures of different views such as on rainy days, sunsets and also of mountains and beaches as mostly I enjoy taking pictures of rainy days and sunsets as I like the peas after them and I also like mountains since I am a mountain person. That's it.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views, such as on rainy days, at sunsets, and of mountains and beaches. Mostly I enjoy photographing rainy days and sunsets because I like the peace after them, and I also like mountains since I am a mountain person.

The original sentence uses awkward repeated phrases and some incorrect word choices (peas -> peace). Present simple is appropriate for habits and preferences; remove unnecessary 'do' and reduce repetition. Use 'at sunsets' and 'photographing' or 'taking pictures' consistently. Replace 'peas' with 'peace'. Break into two sentences for clarity.

× I prefer rural areas over urban areas such as in rural areas you can see vast land whereas in urban areas it is mostly seen buildings and a lot of infrastructure.

✓ I prefer rural areas to urban areas because in rural areas you can see vast open land, whereas in urban areas you mostly see buildings and a lot of infrastructure.

Use 'prefer A to B' rather than 'prefer A over B'. Change 'vast land' to 'vast open land' and correct word order: 'you mostly see buildings'. Replace passive-sounding 'it is mostly seen buildings' with active structure.

× It is not really a good looking in urban areas whereas in rural areas it is very peace and it is very quiet in which I enjoy.

✓ Urban areas are not very attractive, whereas rural areas are peaceful and very quiet, which I enjoy.

'Good looking' is incorrect for places; use 'attractive'. 'It is very peace' is wrong; use adjective 'peaceful'. Combine clauses and use relative pronoun 'which' correctly. Use adjective forms for describing nouns.

× So I like views in rural areas much.

✓ So I like views in rural areas very much.

Adverb placement: 'much' should follow the verb phrase 'like ... very much'. Use 'very much' for emphasis in present simple statements of preference.

× Uh, according to me, I like in other countries since my country it is uh, mostly bland and there are not much thing to see.

✓ According to me, I prefer other countries because my country is mostly bland and there are not many things to see.

Remove unnecessary filler 'uh'. Use 'prefer other countries' rather than 'like in other countries'. Correct pronoun/structure: 'my country it is' -> 'my country is'. Use 'not many things' (plural) instead of 'not much thing'.

× Whereas in other countries, in big countries like America, Canada, Germany or Switzerland, there are many uh, beautiful views which are really enjoyable.

✓ In other countries, such as large ones like America, Canada, Germany, or Switzerland, there are many beautiful views that are really enjoyable.

Replace 'Whereas' at sentence start with neutral 'In other countries' to connect ideas more smoothly. Remove filler 'uh'. Use 'such as' for examples and 'large ones' instead of 'big countries'. Use 'that' or 'which' correctly for defining clause.

× Whereas in my country there are not much enjoyable views with very less places to see.

✓ In my country there are not many enjoyable views and very few places to see.

Use 'many' with countable plural 'views' (not 'much'). Use 'very few' rather than 'very less' for countable nouns. Combine into one clear sentence.