Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, reduce hesitation, use a clear topic sentence and varied vocabulary. Correct plural/singular forms and article use, remove filler words, and give one or two specific examples with a linking phrase. Keep to max 4–5 sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. For example, I love capturing sunsets because of their warm colors, and I often photograph green countryside scenes to show textures and depth. Also, I try to include a person or a tree for scale so the image feels more interesting.

제안: Provide a direct topic sentence stating preference, then give two clear, specific reasons connected with linking words. Avoid repetition and fix grammar (e.g., “I prefer photographing rural areas because…”). Keep answers concise and coherent.

예시: I prefer photographing rural areas because they offer diverse natural scenes and fewer distractions. For instance, I can capture wide open fields and traditional buildings that tell a story, and the natural light in villages often creates dramatic effects.

제안: Start with a clear stance (own country or abroad), then give specific reasons and a brief example. Fix grammar (use past tense correctly, correct pronouns), remove hesitation, and use linking words like “for example” or “because” to structure the response.

예시: I prefer photographing views in my own country because travel is easier and I know where to find beautiful spots. For example, last year I visited Pokhara, which captivated me with its lakes and mountain views, so I spent several evenings capturing reflections and sunsets.

× I genuinely like to take picture of different scenes.

✓ I genuinely like to take pictures of different scenes.

The noun 'picture' should be plural ('pictures') because 'different scenes' implies multiple items; use plural to match quantity. Suggestion: use plural nouns when referring to more than one item.

× Like I I would like to capture the moment of sunset, beauty of greenery, different kinds of landscapes.

✓ For example, I would like to capture moments of sunset, the beauty of greenery, and different kinds of landscapes.

The sentence needs parallel noun phrases and correct articles. 'Capture the moment of sunset' implies a single moment; 'moments of sunset' fits general preference. Add 'the' before 'beauty of greenery' for natural phrasing and insert conjunctions for list clarity. Also remove repeated 'I'.

× To be honest, I like to prefer take a picture of rural areas due to the various reasons like rural areas and those places that have different kind of for.

✓ To be honest, I prefer to take pictures of rural areas for various reasons, such as the different kinds of scenery they offer.

Several issues: 'like to prefer take' is ungrammatical—use either 'like to' or 'prefer to'; 'prefer to take pictures' is correct. Use plural 'pictures' and 'kinds' to match plurality. Remove redundancy 'rural areas and those places' and rephrase to 'such as the different kinds of scenery they offer.'

× To be honest, I like to prefer take a picture of rural areas due to the various reasons like rural areas and those places that have different kind of for.

✓ To be honest, I prefer to take pictures of rural areas for various reasons, such as the different kinds of scenery they offer.

The phrase 'different kind' should be plural 'different kinds' when referring to multiple types. Ensure nouns and quantifiers agree in number.

× Probably I would like to visit my own country due to the various region like it is cheaper like this last year I I get this opportunity to visit Pokhara which captivates me with your natural beauty and landscapes.

✓ Probably I would like to visit places in my own country because it is cheaper. Last year I had the opportunity to visit Pokhara, which captivated me with its natural beauty and landscapes.

Multiple tense and pronoun problems: 'due to the various region' is incorrect—use 'places' or 'regions'. Combine sentences and use past tense 'had' for a past opportunity. 'Captivates' should be past 'captivated' to match 'visited'. Use possessive pronoun 'its' not 'your'. Remove duplicate 'I'.

× Probably I would like to visit my own country due to the various region like it is cheaper like this last year I I get this opportunity to visit Pokhara which captivates me with your natural beauty and landscapes.

✓ Probably I would like to visit places in my own country because it is cheaper. Last year I had the opportunity to visit Pokhara, which captivated me with its natural beauty and landscapes.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'your' to refer to Pokhara; the correct possessive is 'its' when referring to a place. Also adjust pronouns and verb forms to match subject and tense.