Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ответ в целом хороший, но можно сделать его более естественным и лаконичным. Старайтесь начинать с прямого утверждения, затем добавлять одну-две конкретные причины без повторов. Избегайте фраз вроде "to be honest" слишком часто и заменяйте общие слова («significant moments») на более живые детали.

예시: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing landscapes and everyday scenes to preserve memories and show them to my friends and family. For example, I often take photos during trips and family gatherings to remember the atmosphere and share it on social media.

제안: Ответ понятен, но есть ошибки в грамматике и словоупотреблении, а также избыточный список слов. Используйте связующую фразу и конкретнее опишите причины. Исправьте порядок слов и формы: например, «rivers», «filming» нужно заменить на «taking photos» или «scenery», и «feel me better» на «make me feel better».

예시: I prefer rural views because natural scenery like mountains, rivers and forests helps me relax. For instance, walking along a riverbank and photographing the landscape calms me and gives me better photos than busy city streets.

제안: Хороший ответ с личной связью и причинами, но можно улучшить плавность и лексику. Избегайте повторов («To be honest») и упростите фразы: "which I have not explored yet" можно сократить. Добавьте связующее слово для логичности и конкретный пример/эмоцию.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because they make me feel connected to my past. For example, many local landscapes I haven’t explored yet remind me of childhood summers, so I enjoy photographing them to keep those memories alive.

× To be honest, yes, because I want to save significant moments of my life in memory and share it with my friends and family.

✓ To be honest, yes, because I want to save significant moments of my life in my memory and share them with my friends and family.

The sentence incorrectly mixes singular/plural pronouns and a missing article. 'Memory' should be 'my memory' (article + possessive) and 'share it with my friends and family' uses 'it' to refer to 'moments' (plural), so use 'share them'. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents and include appropriate articles or possessives. Grammar problem type's ID: 8 Grammar problem type: Verb + -ing form

× Personally I prefer rural areas views because things such as mountains, river, forest, grass, filming, relaxing and feel me better.

✓ Personally, I prefer views of rural areas because things such as mountains, rivers, forests, grass, and relaxing scenes make me feel better.

Multiple issues: 'rural areas views' has wrong word order and missing preposition; correct is 'views of rural areas' or 'rural views'. 'River' and 'forest' should be plural to match 'things such as'. 'Filming' is incorrect in context; use 'relaxing scenes' or 'filming' removed. 'Feel me better' is incorrect word order and verb usage; correct is 'make me feel better'. Suggestions: use 'views of' for possession, pluralize nouns in lists for generalization, and use 'make me feel' + adjective for expressing effects. Grammar problem type's ID: 11 Grammar problem type: Incorrect use of prepositions

× To be honest, I prefer my own country views because I feel connected here.

✓ To be honest, I prefer the views in my own country because I feel connected here.

'My own country views' is awkward; use 'the views in my own country' or 'my country's views'. The definite article 'the' helps specify the views being referred to. Suggestion: reorder noun phrases and include appropriate articles for clarity. Grammar problem type's ID: 12 Grammar problem_type: Incorrect use of pronouns

× There are a lot of beautiful places which I have not explored yet, and in addition, these views remind me about my childhood.

✓ There are a lot of beautiful places that I have not explored yet, and these views remind me of my childhood.

Use 'that' instead of 'which' in restrictive clauses in informal speech; both acceptable but 'that' is clearer. More importantly, 'remind me about my childhood' is less natural than 'remind me of my childhood'. Suggestion: use 'remind someone of something' and prefer 'that' for essential clause. Also remove 'in addition' as redundant. Grammar problem type's ID: 3 Grammar problem type: There be issue