Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar: use one clear topic sentence, avoid repetitions, and limit to maximum five sentences. Use linking words if adding detail and give a specific example or reason. Also correct tense and phrasing (e.g., "I've been a photographer for years").

예시: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views because I'm a passionate photographer and I've been doing it for several years. For example, I often photograph sunsets at the river near my home, which helps me capture peaceful moments and improve my composition skills.

제안: Start with a direct answer, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words and correct informal contractions (use "because" not multiple 'cause). Mention a concrete example of an urban feature you like.

예시: I prefer urban areas because city skylines and architectural details offer dynamic subjects for photography. For instance, I enjoy shooting at dusk when the skyscrapers light up, which creates strong contrasts and dramatic reflections.

제안: Answer directly, then give specific reasons and an example. Use clearer sentence structure and correct noun phrases (e.g., "picturesque towns in Italy"). Use linking words like "although" or "however" appropriately and avoid repeating "because" too often.

예시: I prefer views in other countries, particularly in Europe, because the variety of historical towns and dramatic coastlines inspires my photography. For example, I love photographing the picturesque towns in Italy and the rugged cliffs of the coast, which provide interesting textures and cultural context for my images.

× Definitely a lot, taking pictures with different views 'cause I'm a huge fan of photography and I have been being a photographer for years, 'cause I think taking pictures of different views, it's so comforting and I just enjoy capturing those memories and moments.

✓ I definitely do. I take pictures of different views because I'm a huge fan of photography, and I have been a photographer for years. I find taking pictures of different views so comforting, and I enjoy capturing those memories and moments.

Errors: incorrect phrase 'Definitely a lot' and sentence fragments, misuse of present perfect progressive 'have been being a photographer' (which is ungrammatical). Suggestions: Use 'I definitely do' to answer 'Do you like...?'. Use simple present for habitual actions ('I take pictures') and correct present perfect 'I have been a photographer for years' or simply 'I have been a photographer for years' but without 'being'. Combine clauses with commas and conjunctions for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Honestly, I prefer urban areas cause those views in the city or downtown area it's amazing 'cause I have been taking photos with those skylines which is so stunning when you get to capturing those special moments especially.

✓ Honestly, I prefer urban areas because the views in the city or downtown are amazing. I have taken many photos of skylines, which are stunning when you capture those special moments.

Errors: informal 'cause' should be 'because' in formal responses; subject-verb agreement 'those views... it's amazing' should be 'those views... are amazing'; awkward tense and structure 'I have been taking photos with those skylines which is so stunning when you get to capturing' is unclear. Suggestions: Use present perfect 'I have taken many photos' to indicate experience, ensure plural agreement ('skylines... are stunning'), and use infinitive/gerund correctly ('when you capture'). Grammar problem type ID:27

× I prefer views in other countries, especially in Europe, although I also love the landscapes at home. European scenery such as the dramatic coastal cliffs and picturesque town of Italy fascinate me because I enjoy photography and exploring historical villages and rocky shoreline.

✓ I prefer views in other countries, especially in Europe, although I also love the landscapes at home. European scenery, such as the dramatic coastal cliffs and the picturesque towns of Italy, fascinates me because I enjoy photography and exploring historical villages and rocky shorelines.

Errors: missing article 'the picturesque town' should be 'the picturesque towns' (number agreement) or 'the picturesque towns of Italy'; subject-verb agreement 'scenery... fascinate' should be 'scenery... fascinates' because 'scenery' is singular; 'rocky shoreline' should be plural to match 'villages' or use parallel nouns. Suggestions: Ensure correct article use ('the') and number agreement, keep parallel structure in lists ('villages and rocky shorelines'). Grammar problem type ID:1