Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more natural and concise, avoid fillers, correct plural/noun usage and add a brief specific example. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one supporting detail with a linking word.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of scenery because it helps me relax and reduces my stress. For example, when I visit a lakeside park I often photograph the reflections at sunrise, which makes me feel calm and refreshed.

제안: Organize into 2–3 clear sentences: state preference, give a reason with linking word, and include a specific detail. Avoid repetition and finish sentences fully. Use correct articles and plural forms.

예시: I prefer rural views because I grew up in the countryside and love its natural beauty. For example, the green fields and winding dirt roads around my village create peaceful compositions, so I often photograph them instead of busy city streets.

제안: Begin with a clear statement of preference, then give specific, coherent reasons using linking words. Avoid vague fillers and finish thoughts. Mention concrete examples of landscapes you photograph in your country.

예시: I prefer taking pictures in my own country because India offers a wide variety of landscapes. For instance, I enjoy photographing the Himalayan foothills and the Thar Desert, which provide very different colours and moods that I find calming and inspiring.

× Yes, I do like taking pictures, especially of scenery and natures, all because I think, uh, it gives me a sense of calmness and reduces my stress.

✓ Yes, I do like taking pictures, especially of scenery and nature, because I think it gives me a sense of calm and reduces my stress.

The word 'nature' is uncountable and should not be pluralized as 'natures' (Grammar Problem Type ID 1). 'Scenery' is also uncountable and should not be preceded by 'of' plus plural; 'of scenery and nature' or 'of the scenery and nature' is correct. 'All because' is redundant; 'because' is clearer. Suggestion: use uncountable nouns correctly and remove redundant words.

× I basically belong to a rural area I love living there and I love the views that I'm surrounded with, full of nature, full of joy and all the greenery is breathtakingly beautiful in rural area as compared to urban areas so I enjoy taking pictures in rural area because they are less modernized and they.

✓ I basically come from a rural area; I love living there and the views that surround me are full of nature and joy. The greenery in rural areas is breathtakingly beautiful compared to urban areas, so I enjoy taking pictures there because they are less modernized.

This original sentence has run-on and fragment problems and incorrect pronoun/phrase use (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). 'Belong to a rural area' is unnatural; 'come from a rural area' or 'live in a rural area' is better. Replace 'I'm surrounded with' with 'surround me' and use 'rural areas' plural when comparing with urban areas. The final clause 'and they.' is incomplete; clarify the referent ('there' meaning rural areas). Suggestion: split into shorter sentences, fix pronouns and use comparative phrasing correctly.

× Do you prefer views in your own country or in other countries? Student: India is a diverse country and a favorite tourist place, so I think I love taking pictures in my country only because here there is full of like series full of mountains. You can go and see mountains, even deserts and it's very calming and relaxing to.

✓ India is a diverse country and a popular tourist destination, so I prefer taking pictures in my own country because it has many mountain ranges. You can see mountains and even deserts here, and it is very calming and relaxing.

Several issues: 'a favorite tourist place' is awkward; 'a popular tourist destination' is clearer (Grammar Problem Type ID 13/22). 'Here there is full of like series full of mountains' is ungrammatical—use 'it has many mountain ranges' or 'there are many mountains' (Grammar Problem Type ID 26 and 1). The ending 'and it's very calming and relaxing to' is a fragment; change to 'and it is very calming and relaxing.' Suggestion: choose precise quantifiers ('many', 'several') and proper noun phrases, remove filler words like 'like', and complete sentences fully.