Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatically accurate, concise, and organize your response with a clear topic sentence followed by one or two supporting details. Avoid filler sounds (e.g., “uh”) and correct verb forms and word choices (enjoying → enjoy; earn → have bought/have; picture videoing → taking videos). Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, and, also, to).

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often use a small compact camera I bought to capture landscapes and occasional selfies to remember the places I visit. This helps me keep memories of my travels and practice my photography skills.

제안: Start with a direct topic sentence stating your preference, then give specific reasons and a brief comparison using linking words (because, whereas, while). Correct word order and use adjectives properly (peaceful and quiet).

예시: I prefer rural areas because I enjoy the countryside and its natural environment. For example, rural places are more peaceful and quiet than cities, so I can relax and appreciate nature, whereas urban areas are often crowded and noisy.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and then contrast the two choices with specific reasons. Correct grammar (have → has; a lot of park → many parks or a lot of parks) and use linking words (however, also) to structure your answer. Add one specific example to support each preference.

예시: I like both, for different reasons. Because I was born in Malaysia, I feel comfortable with the familiar local scenery and cultural atmosphere; however, I also enjoy Melbourne because it has many green spaces and parks where I can relax and take photos.

× Yes uh, I enjoying taking photo of different views.

✓ Yes, uh, I enjoy taking photos of different views.

The sentence uses 'enjoying' without an auxiliary verb, but with simple present tense the correct form is 'I enjoy' (base verb) for habitual actions. Also plural 'photos' is appropriate when referring to multiple pictures. Suggestion: use 'I enjoy' for habits and pluralize countable nouns when generalizing.

× I earn a couple of small camera.

✓ I have a couple of small cameras.

'Earn' is incorrect in this context; likely intended verb is 'have' or 'own'. Also 'a couple of' requires a plural noun ('cameras'). Suggestion: replace 'earn' with 'have' and use plural for countable nouns after quantifiers.

× I like taking picture videoing and some selfie to remember the place that I visit.

✓ I like taking pictures, recording videos, and taking selfies to remember the places that I visit.

Parallel structure requires gerunds in the same form: 'taking pictures', 'recording videos', 'taking selfies'. 'Picture' should be plural 'pictures'; 'videoing' is misspelled and better as 'recording videos' or 'taking videos'. 'Some selfie' is incorrect; use 'selfies' plural. 'Place' should be plural 'places' when referring generally. Suggestion: keep parallel gerund forms and correct pluralization and word choice.

× I prefer rural areas because I like the countryside more and I like the natural environment and peaceful and less noise.

✓ I prefer rural areas because I like the countryside more; I like the natural environment, peacefulness, and less noise.

Sentence has coordination and adjective/noun form issues. 'Peaceful' is an adjective; when listing nouns use 'peacefulness' or 'they are peaceful'. 'Less noise' is acceptable but fits better as 'less noise' as a noun phrase. Suggestion: use consistent parts of speech when listing features and add punctuation for clarity.

× I was born in Malaysia so I feel more comfortable with the local scenery and I love Melbourne too.

✓ I was born in Malaysia, so I feel more comfortable with the local scenery, and I love Melbourne too.

Grammatically this sentence is mostly correct; added commas improve clarity. 'Was born' is correct past passive for birthplace. No tense change needed. Explanation: keep 'was born' for past event and present verbs 'feel' and 'love' for current states.

× Melbourne have a lot of green space, a lot of park.

✓ Melbourne has a lot of green space and a lot of parks.

Subject 'Melbourne' is singular, so verb must be 'has' not 'have'. Also 'a lot of park' should be plural 'parks' or 'a lot of parks' or 'a lot of parkland'; choose 'parks' to match meaning. Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with singular subjects and pluralize countable nouns appropriately.