Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, and give one or two specific reasons or examples using linking words. Keep answers under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photography helps me capture places I cannot visit often. For example, I recently photographed a coastal sunset near my city, which reminded me of a trip I took last year.

제안: Good direct answer and supporting details. To improve, use plural/singular agreement and add a linking word or a short specific example to make it more natural and vivid.

예시: I prefer rural areas because I enjoy being in nature, which energizes and relaxes me. For instance, on my last day off I went to a nearby village to walk through rice fields and took photos of the landscape.

제안: Make the response more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct noun/pronoun agreement, and give a specific example or reason using linking words like 'because' or 'for example.'

예시: I prefer views in my own country because traditional lifestyles remain visible in many towns, which makes scenes feel nostalgic. For example, I enjoy photographing local festivals where people still wear traditional clothes.

× I like taking picture of different views because, uh, I can't go anywhere everywhere to the to take different pictures and then it uh, I can take picture at the different, uh, I don't know.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views because I can't go everywhere to take different pictures, and I can take pictures in different places.

Original sentence has errors with countable noun + -ing verb forms and repetition. 'Picture' should be plural 'pictures' after 'taking' and after 'take'. Remove redundant words 'anywhere everywhere' and extra filler. Use 'in different places' instead of 'at the different' for natural preposition and clarity. Ensure gerund 'taking' is followed by plural noun when general: 'taking pictures'.

× I prefer rural area because I enjoy being in nature.

✓ I prefer rural areas because I enjoy being in nature.

The noun 'area' should be plural 'areas' when speaking generally. Use plural to match general preference: 'rural areas'.

× So when I have a day off I often go to the countryside.

✓ So when I have a day off, I often go to the countryside.

Add a comma after the introductory adverbial clause 'So when I have a day off' for correct punctuation and natural rhythm. 'the countryside' is correct article usage; only punctuation needed.

× I like views of my country because their lifestyle has not changed since long time ago so I can see traditional views from everyone everywhere in my country and also their views makes me feel nostalgic.

✓ I like the views in my country because its lifestyle has not changed for a long time, so I can see traditional scenes everywhere and they make me feel nostalgic.

Pronoun 'their' incorrectly refers to 'my country' (singular); use 'its'. 'Since long time ago' is incorrect; use 'for a long time' or 'since a long time ago'. 'Views from everyone everywhere' is awkward; use 'traditional scenes everywhere'. Subject-verb agreement: 'their views makes' should be 'they make' to match plural subject. Also use 'the views in my country' for natural phrasing.