Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammatical accuracy and clarity, shorten redundant parts, and use specific vocabulary. Make the opening direct, correct verb forms, and avoid repetition. Add one or two specific details (when/where/why) linked clearly with a connector.

예시: Yes, I do. I especially enjoy photographing natural scenes such as the sea, mountains and dramatic skies because capturing them helps me relax after a stressful day. For example, I often shoot at sunset and then edit my photos before sharing my favorites with friends.

제안: Be concise and correct word choices; use linking words to explain reasons and provide a specific example. Fix vocabulary (e.g., 'road') and grammar, and avoid vague phrases like 'convey the message' without specifying what you mean.

예시: I prefer urban views, such as skyscrapers and busy streets, because they reflect modern life and its fast pace. For instance, a photo of a crowded road at rush hour can show how hectic city life has become.

제안: Avoid fillers and improve grammar and word order. State your preference clearly, give a concise reason with linking words, and add a brief specific example. Correct verb forms (plan → planned/plan) and phrasing ('worth going for').

예시: I like both, but if I had to choose I would pick views abroad because traveling makes the experience feel special. For example, taking photos of a foreign city’s architecture during a vacation creates memories I wouldn’t get at home.

× I really enjoy taking pictures of natural attractions like seas, mountains and dramatic skies because capturing the scenes is coming and helps me relieve stress.

✓ I really enjoy taking pictures of natural attractions like the sea, mountains and dramatic skies because capturing the scenes calms me and helps me relieve stress.

Original used 'capturing the scenes is coming' which is ungrammatical. The gerund 'capturing' can be subject but needs correct verb: use 'calms' to describe effect. Also 'seas' is usually 'the sea' or 'the sea and mountains'; choose singular 'the sea' or 'the seas' depending on context. The correction uses appropriate gerund and present simple verb to express habitual effect. Suggestion: use 'capturing the scenes calms me' to show the action reduces stress.

× I offend, edit my photos and share the best one with my friends.

✓ I often edit my photos and share the best ones with my friends.

'Offend' is incorrect word choice; likely meant 'often' (an adverb of frequency). Also 'the best one' should be plural 'the best ones' when referring to multiple photos. Use adverb 'often' before the main verb and plural noun for multiple photos.

× I would say that I am a city girl so I prefer the picture of the skyscrapers or the crowded Rd. because it can convey the message that in this contemporary world people tend to be more stressful and hectic lifestyle.

✓ I would say that I am a city girl, so I prefer pictures of skyscrapers or crowded roads because they can convey the message that in this contemporary world people tend to have more stressful and hectic lifestyles.

Several issues: 'the picture of the skyscrapers' should be plural 'pictures of skyscrapers' and 'crowded Rd.' should be 'crowded roads'. Pronoun agreement: 'it can' should be 'they can' to match plural 'pictures'. Also 'people tend to be more stressful and hectic lifestyle' is ungrammatical; replace with 'tend to have more stressful and hectic lifestyles' to use correct verb and noun forms. Punctuation and article usage adjusted for clarity.

× Umm actually I prefer both but if I had to shoot I would choose the overseas view because in my country I can just go and take a picture but for the overseas view I need to planned and it's quite worth going for and worth taking for.

✓ Actually I prefer both, but if I had to choose, I would pick overseas views because in my country I can just go and take a picture, whereas for overseas views I need to plan, and it's quite worth the trip and the effort to take them.

Errors include wrong verb 'shoot' (informal) and incorrect past participle 'planned' used instead of infinitive 'plan'. 'If I had to shoot I would choose' adjusted to 'if I had to choose, I would pick'. Also awkward ending 'worth going for and worth taking for' simplified to 'worth the trip and the effort to take them'. Tenses maintained: conditional 'if I had to' + 'would' is correct. Use base verbs 'plan' and 'take' in appropriate structures.