Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use correct collocations and grammar (e.g., "perspectives of an object" -> "different perspectives"). Add one specific example and a linking word to support your point. Keep answers to under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because it lets me capture varied perspectives. For example, by changing my angle I can highlight textures or patterns that aren’t obvious from straight on. This helps me create more interesting images overall.

제안: Correct vocabulary and grammar, and make the response more coherent. Replace incorrect words ("news" -> "views") and use linking words (e.g., "because", "for example"). Give specific sensory details and avoid sentence fragments. Keep within five sentences.

예시: I prefer rural views because they are quieter and more natural. For example, I often notice birds flying and the way tree branches form interesting shapes, and I like focusing on the colours and textures of leaves.

제안: Fix grammar, repetition and clarity. State a direct preference, then give a clear reason with one specific example. Avoid confusing explanations (e.g., "Taiwan is a small island" is fine but explain concisely why that affects the view). Use linking words like "because" or "for example" and keep to under five sentences.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they often feel more novel and less crowded. For example, beaches in Australia seem more spacious and varied, whereas popular spots in Taiwan can be busy with many people, which makes it harder to enjoy the scenery.

× I like taking pictures of different views. It's because it provides me a wide range of perspectives of the object, so sometimes I can see the different angles that can bring me a special side.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views. It's because they give me a wide range of perspectives of an object, so sometimes I can see different angles that show a special side.

The original uses 'provides' (singular) with plural 'pictures' and 'a wide range of perspectives', causing subject-verb disagreement and unnatural reference. Change 'provides me' to 'they give me' to match the plural subject 'pictures'. Use 'an object' rather than 'the object' for general reference. Replace 'can bring me a special side' with 'show a special side' for natural phrasing and correct verb choice. Suggestions: ensure subject and verb agree in number, keep references consistent (plural -> they), and use clearer verbs like 'show' for visual descriptions.

× I prefer news in the rural areas is because sometimes I can see the birds flying in the sky and sometimes the tree just catch my eyes. Like I can focus on the shapes the color of leaves.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because sometimes I can see birds flying in the sky and sometimes a tree catches my eye. I can focus on the shapes and the colors of the leaves.

This sentence has several issues: 'news' is incorrect word choice (should be 'views'), 'in the rural areas is because' is ungrammatical (redundant verb 'is'); use 'because' to introduce reason. Subject-verb agreement error: 'the tree just catch' should be 'a tree catches' (singular subject with third-person singular verb). 'Catch my eyes' is idiomatic but singular 'catch my eye' is more natural. 'Like' starting a sentence is informal — replaced by a complete sentence. Also missing 'and' between 'shapes' and 'the color(s)' and plural agreement 'colors'. Suggestions: choose correct nouns, use 'because' without extra 'is', ensure subject-verb agreement, and connect phrases with conjunctions.

× I prefer the news in in other countries, such as Australia, for example, the views in the sea will probably be different than in Taiwan because Taiwan is a small island and which means that will have a lot of people standing in there just for one view.

✓ I prefer views in other countries, such as Australia; for example, the seascapes there will probably be different from those in Taiwan because Taiwan is a small island, which means there are often many people gathered in one place to see a view.

Problems fixed: 'the news in in other countries' is wrong word choice and double 'in'; use 'views in other countries'. Run-on sentence fixed with punctuation and clearer clauses. Use 'seascapes' or 'the views of the sea' instead of 'the views in the sea'. Use comparative 'different from' rather than 'different than' for standard British/neutral English. 'Which means that will have a lot of people standing in there' is ungrammatical; replace with 'which means there are often many people gathered in one place to see a view' to fix subject and verb and preposition usage. Suggestions: avoid repetition, choose correct nouns, use proper comparatives, and restructure long sentences into clearer clauses.