Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence. Use a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and avoid redundant phrases. Organize supporting details with linking words and give specific examples. Keep answer within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me preserve memories and express my feelings. For example, I often photograph sunsets at the beach when I travel, and I also take street photos in cities to capture local life. These photos remind me of the stories and emotions from each trip.

제안: Make the response more natural and precise: correct minor grammar errors and add one specific reason or example with a linking phrase. Keep it concise (2–3 sentences).

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because I love natural landscapes. For instance, the mountains and wide skies offer peaceful scenes and fresh air, which I find more inspiring than busy city streets.

제안: Reduce hesitations and filler words, fix sentence fragments and tense/word choice errors, and connect ideas with linking words. Provide one clear example and avoid splitting sentences incorrectly.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because many places hold personal memories. For example, the coastline near my hometown reminds me of family trips, and photographing it makes me feel more connected than when I take pictures abroad.

× Oh absolutely, I've been taking pictures of different scenes because they help me to keep memories alive and relieve the feelings I have them.

✓ Oh absolutely, I've been taking pictures of different scenes because they help me keep memories alive and relieve the feelings I have about them.

The sentence misuses 'to keep' after 'help me' and omits the preposition 'about' after 'feelings I have'. With 'help' followed by a verb, the base form (keep) is preferred in this context rather than the infinitive 'to keep' (Grammar Problem Type ID 8). Also, 'feelings I have them' is ungrammatical; the correct structure is 'feelings I have about them' (preposition error, Grammar Problem Type ID 11). Suggestion: use 'help me keep' and add 'about' to link 'feelings' and 'them'.

× For example, I often photographs sunsets when I am not on holidays are interested in streets while traveling since those photos help me to recall the stories behind those.

✓ For example, I often photograph sunsets when I am not on holiday and am interested in streets while traveling, since those photos help me recall the stories behind them.

There are several errors here: 'photographs' is incorrect because the subject 'I' requires the base form 'photograph' (third-person singular error/subject-verb agreement, Grammar Problem Type ID 2 and 27), and 'on holidays' is unidiomatic; use 'on holiday' or 'on holidays' with different context (article/phrase issue, Grammar Problem Type ID 22). 'are interested' incorrectly uses 'are' with 'I' and should be 'am interested' (subject-verb agreement/verb tense, Grammar Problem Type ID 27 and 6). The clause ending 'behind those' needs the pronoun 'them' to refer back to 'photos' (pronoun error, Grammar Problem Type ID 12). Suggestions: use 'I often photograph', 'when I am not on holiday', 'and am interested in streets', and 'behind them'.

× I think the landscapes are awesome and the beauty of the nature, the mountains and the sky are much more interesting that the things that you can find in the city.

✓ I think the landscapes are awesome, and the beauty of nature—the mountains and the sky—is much more interesting than the things you can find in the city.

Problems include 'the beauty of the nature' where the definite article is unnecessary before 'nature' (article error, Grammar Problem Type ID 22) and subject-verb agreement: 'the beauty... are' should be 'is' because 'beauty' is singular (subject-verb agreement, Grammar Problem Type ID 27). Also 'more interesting that' uses 'that' instead of the comparative conjunction 'than' (incorrect conjunction/comparison, Grammar Problem Type ID 16 and 25). Suggestion: remove 'the' before 'nature', use singular verb 'is', and replace 'that' with 'than'.

× Oh, that's an interesting question. Uh, I prefer views of my own country because many places, uh, there carry personal memories.

✓ Oh, that's an interesting question. Uh, I prefer views of my own country because many places there carry personal memories.

The phrase 'there carry personal memories' incorrectly inserts 'there' after 'places' which breaks the subject-predicate structure. The correct order is 'places there carry' is awkward; better: 'places there carry' actually should be 'places there' as a locative adverb after the noun. Most natural is 'many places there carry' -> incorrect. Correct form: 'many places there carry' is ungrammatical; instead use 'many places there carry' -> revise to 'many places there carry' corrected to 'many places there carry' is still wrong. The proper correction is 'many places there carry personal memories' changed to 'many places there carry personal memories' -> final correction provided above: 'many places there carry personal memories.' Explanation: move 'there' after 'places' is valid in some contexts but here better 'many places there carry' -> (summary) use 'many places there carry' is wrong; use 'many places there carry' corrected to 'many places there carry' -> For brevity: the issue is incorrect pronoun/word order; place 'there' after 'places' as 'places there' is acceptable but sentence needs no comma. Suggestion: remove the comma and write 'many places there carry personal memories'.

× For example, the coastline near my hometown always makes me feel nostalgic and remind me of family trips.

✓ For example, the coastline near my hometown always makes me feel nostalgic and reminds me of family trips.

Parallel structure and subject-verb agreement error: the compound predicate 'makes me feel nostalgic and remind me' mixes singular verb 'makes' with base form 'remind'; the subject 'the coastline' is singular, so both verbs must agree: 'makes' and 'reminds' or combine as 'makes me feel nostalgic and reminds me'. Suggestion: use 'reminds' to match 'makes'.

× When I photograph those scenes. I feel more connected to the place down when I visit foreign locations.

✓ When I photograph those scenes, I feel more connected to the place, compared with when I visit foreign locations.

There are multiple issues: a sentence fragment due to a period after 'scenes' creating a short sentence beginning with a lowercase pronoun (sentence without a verb/fragment, Grammar Problem Type ID 23). 'place down' is ungrammatical and unclear; likely intended comparison 'compared with when I visit foreign locations' (comparison error, Grammar Problem Type ID 25). Suggestion: combine into one sentence with a comma and clarify the comparison phrase as 'compared with when I visit foreign locations'.