Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity, grammar and conciseness. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, avoid filler words (umm), correct verb forms, and give one or two specific examples to support your answer. Keep your response to 2–4 sentences and use linking words if adding details.

예시: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views. I often photograph my family and friends, and I also take shots of interesting things I see when I walk around my neighborhood. For example, I recently photographed a colorful market street that had great lighting and lively scenes.

제안: Polish pronunciation and word choice, fix small grammar mistakes, and make linking clearer. Begin with a direct stance, then give specific reasons using clear linking words (for example, because, however). Replace unclear words (e.g., "ruined scenery") with accurate vocabulary such as "rural scenery."

예시: I slightly prefer urban views because I enjoy vibrant architecture and busy streets that offer dynamic photo opportunities. However, I also like rural scenery for its peaceful landscapes and fresh air, so I sometimes photograph the countryside when I want to relax.

제안: Correct factual or word-choice errors and improve sentence flow. Start with a direct answer, then give two specific, accurately named examples and explain briefly why you prefer them. Avoid awkward phrases and check plural/singular agreement and article use.

예시: I prefer views in my own country. Vietnam has spectacular scenery, such as the limestone karsts of Ha Long Bay and the terraced rice fields in Sapa, which I find more inspiring to photograph than the streets of European cities.

× Well to be honest I am very photographic person I like to taking a lot of pictures and such as family such as friends and umm umm the everything I see I I love to taking friend.

✓ Well, to be honest, I am a very photographic person. I like taking a lot of pictures of my family and friends and of everything I see; I love taking photos.

Pronoun and article issues: 'I am very photographic person' needs the indefinite article 'a' before 'very photographic person' (Article errors, ID 22) and counts as pronoun/article misuse. 'such as family such as friends' is awkward; use 'of my family and friends' to show possession and correct noun phrase. 'I like to taking' mixes infinitive and gerund forms; according to the allowed types we correct by using the gerund 'taking' after 'like' (Verb + -ing form, ID 8). 'the everything I see' incorrectly uses the definite article 'the' with 'everything' (Article errors, ID 22) and unneeded repetition 'I I'. Also 'taking friend' is wrong noun choice; use 'taking photos'. Suggestion: include necessary articles, remove repetitions, use 'like taking' + object and 'of' to show relationship.

× I'm very neutral but I slightly prefer urban views because I enjoy the vibrant architecture and busy St.

✓ I'm very neutral, but I slightly prefer urban views because I enjoy the vibrant architecture and busy streets.

Word and tense/form errors: 'busy St.' is an incomplete abbreviation and should be 'busy streets' to match the plural noun referring to general urban areas (Singular and plural issue, ID 1). The present tense 'I slightly prefer' and 'I enjoy' are correct, but the noun was incorrect. Suggestion: write full word 'streets' and ensure noun number matches meaning.

× However, I also appreciate ruined scenery for as peaceful landscapes and fresh air, so sometimes I take photos of the countryside when I want to relax.

✓ However, I also appreciate rural scenery for its peaceful landscapes and fresh air, so sometimes I take photos of the countryside when I want to relax.

Preposition and word choice errors: 'ruined scenery for as peaceful landscapes' is incorrect. 'Ruined' is wrong word choice — use 'rural' (relating to countryside). 'for as' is incorrect preposition sequence; use 'for its' to show possession 'its peaceful landscapes'. Suggestion: choose correct adjective 'rural' and use 'for its' to link appreciation to the landscapes and air.

× Yes, I prefer views in my own country. Vietnam has spectacular scenery from the lamb storm cast of Haddon Bay to the terraced rice field in Sapa, and I love photographing this landscapes more than sightseeing in European cities.

✓ Yes, I prefer views in my own country. Vietnam has spectacular scenery from the limestone karsts of Ha Long Bay to the terraced rice fields in Sapa, and I love photographing these landscapes more than sightseeing in European cities.

Multiple errors: 'lamb storm cast of Haddon Bay' is incorrect word formation and names — the correct term is 'limestone karsts' and the common English name is 'Ha Long Bay' (proper nouns). 'terraced rice field' should be plural 'terraced rice fields' to match general reference (Singular and plural issue, ID 1). 'this landscapes' is wrong agreement between demonstrative and plural noun; use 'these landscapes' (Incorrect use of pronouns/demonstratives, ID 12). Suggestion: use correct place names and geological terms, match plural forms, and use the appropriate demonstrative for plural nouns.