Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Riscrivi la risposta in modo più fluido e grammaticalmente corretto, iniziando con una frase tematica chiara. Evita ripetizioni (ad esempio "taking pic, taking pictures") e correggi la struttura temporale ("when I was a child"). Fornisci un dettaglio specifico per arricchire la risposta (ad esempio il tipo di fotocamera o una scena preferita) e mantieni il discorso entro 3–4 frasi usando connettivi semplici come "also" o "for example".

예시: Yes, I love taking photographs of different views. I have been passionate about photography since I was a child, and I especially enjoy capturing flowers and wide landscapes. For example, I often photograph the sunrise over fields because of the soft light and colours.

제안: Correggi errori grammaticali e scegli vocaboli più precisi (ad esempio "green fields" invece di "green files"). Inizia con una frase chiara che risponda direttamente alla domanda, poi aggiungi dettagli specifici e una ragione personale. Usa connettivi come "because" e "for example" per rendere il discorso coerente e limitati a 2–4 frasi.

예시: I prefer rural areas because they offer beautiful natural scenery and a peaceful atmosphere. The countryside usually has green fields and vibrant colours, which relax me and help me unwind after a busy week.

제안: Semplifica e chiarisci l'idea principale: rispondi con una frase diretta e poi fornisci uno o due esempi concreti. Evita ripetizioni come "all the views in all the countries" e correggi la grammatica ("every country has its own features"). Usa connettivi come "because" e "for example" per organizzare meglio la risposta e mantieni il numero di frasi entro 3.

예시: I enjoy views both in my country and abroad because every country has its own unique features. For example, I like the historic architecture at home and the dramatic coastlines I’ve seen in other countries.

× Yes, of course I love to taking pic, taking pictures of different views and I also have when I from when I was a child, the passion of photography.

✓ Yes, of course I love taking pictures of different views and I have had a passion for photography since I was a child.

The phrase 'love to taking' mixes the infinitive 'to' with the gerund '-ing'; use either 'love to take' or 'love taking'. 'Pic' is informal and should be 'pictures'. The clause 'I also have when I from when I was a child, the passion of photography' is ungrammatical and needs reordering and correct tense: use present perfect 'have had' plus 'since I was a child' to express a continuing passion.

× I love to take photos of flowers and landscapes and different Wallpapers.

✓ I love to take photos of flowers, landscapes, and different scenes.

'Wallpapers' is inappropriate in this context; likely meant 'scenery' or 'scenes'. Also capitalize only proper nouns; use parallel nouns separated by commas. 'Different scenes' fits better than 'different Wallpapers'.

× I prefer rural areas because they have a beautiful natural scenery and a peaceful atmosphere.

✓ I prefer rural areas because they have beautiful natural scenery and a peaceful atmosphere.

'A beautiful natural scenery' is incorrect because 'scenery' is an uncountable noun; do not use the indefinite article 'a' before it. Remove 'a' to agree with the uncountable noun.

× I think that are they are characterized by some green files, also beautiful colors.

✓ I think that they are characterized by green fields and beautiful colors.

Original has word order and wrong word choice: 'are they are' is duplicated and 'files' should be 'fields'. 'Some' is unnecessary; 'green fields' is natural. Correct pronoun placement is 'they are characterized by'.

× Then they relaxed me.

✓ Then they relax me.

'Relaxed' is past tense/past participle; the student is describing a general effect using present simple: 'they relax me'. Use present tense to match 'I prefer' and general statements.

× I prefer all the views in all the countries because I I think that every countries is composed by some particularity.

✓ I prefer the views in all countries because I think that every country has its own particularities.

Errors: duplicated 'I', 'every countries' mixes singular 'every' with plural 'countries' — use singular 'country'. 'Is composed by' is not natural; use 'has' or 'is characterized by'. 'Some particularity' should be plural 'particularities' if speaking generally.

× That character is itself themselves.

✓ Those characteristics are unique to each country.

Original mixes singular/plural pronouns incorrectly. 'That character is itself themselves' is nonsensical. Better to say 'Those characteristics are unique to each country' to convey the intended meaning.

× So I also like to my view.

✓ So I also like the views I see.

'Like to my view' is ungrammatical and wrong word order. Use 'like' + noun phrase: 'I like the views I see' or 'I also like the views of different countries'. This corrects sentence structure and clarifies meaning.