Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: ควรตอบให้ชัดเจนและเป็นธรรมชาติ ใช้ประโยคหัวข้อแล้วตามด้วยรายละเอียดสั้นๆ แก้ไวยากรณ์ คำศัพท์ที่ไม่เหมาะสม และหลีกเลี่ยงคำซ้ำ เช่น ‘a pictures’, ‘paradigm’, และการจัดลำดับคำในประโยค

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. I especially like capturing cityscapes of Bangkok because the mix of modern buildings and traditional temples looks beautiful at sunset.

제안: ปรับไวยากรณ์และความชัดเจนของเหตุผล ใช้ linking words เพื่อเชื่อมประโยค และระบุรายละเอียดที่เฉพาะเจาะจงมากขึ้น เช่น ประเภทของสัตว์หรือองค์ประกอบธรรมชาติที่ชอบ

예시: I prefer rural views because they feel more natural and peaceful. For example, I enjoy seeing birds and small mammals in open fields, and the air is usually much cleaner than in the city.

제안: ตอบให้ชัดเจนพร้อมเหตุผลที่สอดคล้อง แก้ข้อผิดพลาดด้านไวยากรณ์และคำศัพท์ (‘there have many a lot of’) และให้รายละเอียดที่เป็นรูปธรรมเกี่ยวกับสิ่งที่ชอบในประเทศของตน เช่น สถานที่หรือกิจกรรม

예시: I prefer views in my own country because I know the places well and feel comfortable there. For instance, Pattaya offers lively beaches, modern facilities and also some nearby nature spots where you can see local wildlife.

× Yes, of course I'd like to take a pictures of paradigm with to see how the beautiful city is Bangkok is.

✓ Yes, of course I'd like to take pictures of the city to see how beautiful Bangkok is.

The original sentence has multiple issues: 'take a pictures' mixes singular article with plural noun — use 'take pictures' (no 'a'). 'paradigm' is the wrong word for 'city view' so replaced with 'the city'. 'with to see' is incorrect; use an infinitive 'to see' without 'with'. The clause 'how the beautiful city is Bangkok is' has incorrect word order and duplication; correct order is 'how beautiful Bangkok is'. Suggestion: remove unnecessary articles, use correct noun choice, use the infinitive correctly, and place adjective before the noun phrase 'how beautiful Bangkok is'.

× I prefer in rural area because it's more natural.

✓ I prefer rural areas because they're more natural.

Use of preposition 'in' after 'prefer' is incorrect here; prefer is followed by a noun phrase: 'prefer rural areas'. 'rural area' should be plural to match general preference: 'rural areas'. Also subject-verb agreement and pronoun: plural 'areas' requires 'they're'. Suggestion: omit the preposition, pluralize the noun for general statements, and match the verb to the plural subject.

× You can see wildlife animal with no skyscraper and clear pollutions because in the real area there are no pollution.

✓ You can see wildlife with no skyscrapers and clear air because in rural areas there is no pollution.

Several issues: 'wildlife animal' is redundant; 'wildlife' alone is correct or 'wild animals'. 'no skyscraper' should be plural 'no skyscrapers'. 'clear pollutions' is incorrect: 'pollution' is uncountable, so use 'clear air' or 'no pollution'. 'in the real area' is wrong word choice and form; replace with 'in rural areas'. Also match singular/plural and article usage: 'there is no pollution' for uncountable noun. Suggestion: use correct noun forms for uncountable and plural nouns and choose appropriate words ('rural areas', 'clear air').

× Of course it's my country.

✓ Of course, my country.

As a direct answer to 'Do you prefer views in your own country or in other countries?' a better grammar-correct short answer is 'Of course, my country.' The original 'It's my country.' is not wrong grammatically but more natural is to respond directly; however if keeping full sentence: 'Of course, it's my country.' would be acceptable. Suggestion: include a comma after 'Of course' and choose concise phrasing.

× It's a very wonderful city.

✓ It's a very lovely city.

'Very wonderful' is awkward because 'wonderful' already implies a high degree; 'very' is unnecessary. Use 'very lovely' or simply 'wonderful'. Suggestion: avoid redundant intensifiers; choose a single strong adjective or pair appropriately.

× In Pattaya there have many a lot of facility, a lot of skyscraper, a lot of our life animals.

✓ In Pattaya there are many facilities, lots of skyscrapers, and many wild animals.

Grammar issues: 'there have' is incorrect; use 'there are' with plural nouns. 'many a lot of facility' mixes 'many' and 'a lot of' and uses singular 'facility' incorrectly; use 'many facilities' or 'a lot of facilities'. 'a lot of skyscraper' should be 'lots of skyscrapers' or 'a lot of skyscrapers'. 'a lot of our life animals' is unclear — likely intended 'wild animals'; use 'many wild animals'. Also ensure parallel structure in list. Suggestion: use 'there are' with plural nouns, choose one quantifier form ('many' or 'a lot of'), pluralize nouns, and use correct noun 'wild animals'.