Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and precise: correct vocabulary (e.g. 'hobbies' or 'interests' instead of 'mentions'), reduce redundancy, and keep answers within 3–4 sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail and a brief example. Pronunciation and fluency could be smoother by avoiding long pauses and fillers.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. Photography is one of my favorite hobbies; my fiancé gave me a camera last year. I especially enjoy portrait and landscape photography, and I often practice by photographing friends at sunset to capture warm light.

제안: Make the answer more concise and organized: state preference clearly, then give two specific reasons linked by a connector (e.g. 'because' or 'so'). Avoid filler words and run-on sentences; use plural/singular correctly ('rivers').

예시: I prefer rural views because they offer more natural scenery, such as mountains, rivers and open fields, which helps me relax. For example, I love watching sunsets over a quiet field after a long day.

제안: Avoid hesitation and be specific: begin with a clear statement of preference, then give concise reasons and a concrete example. Correct prepositions ('in other countries') and reduce repetition. Mention a specific memorable scene or difference to make your answer more vivid.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy exploring new landscapes and cultures. For instance, I recently visited Canada and was impressed by its vast mountains and lakes, which felt very different from the tourist spots I've already seen in India.

× Yes I do because photography is one of my favorite mentions.

✓ Yes, I do because photography is one of my favorite hobbies.

The word 'mentions' is incorrect in this context; 'hobby' or 'pastime' is the correct noun. Also missing comma after 'Yes'. Use 'hobby' to refer to an activity you enjoy. Suggestion: replace 'mentions' with 'hobbies' and add a comma after 'Yes'.

× I have a camera which is gifted by my fiance.

✓ I have a camera that was gifted to me by my fiance.

The original uses passive with wrong structure 'which is gifted by my fiance'. Use 'that was gifted to me by' to clarify the giver and receiver. Also 'which' is acceptable but 'that' is more natural in defining clause. Suggestion: use past tense 'was gifted' and include 'to me'.

× I like taking portraits of people and landscape.

✓ I like taking portraits of people and landscapes.

Mixes plural 'portraits' with singular 'landscape'. Use plural 'landscapes' to match 'portraits of people' and to refer generally to scenic views. Suggestion: make both nouns plural for parallelism.

× I prefer views in rural areas to urban areas because in rural areas there are lots of scenic places like mountains, river, open fields so and it's the best place to relax especially during the sunset.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas to those in urban areas because rural areas have many scenic places like mountains, rivers, and open fields, and they are the best places to relax, especially at sunset.

Problems: awkward comparison 'to urban areas' lacks 'those', singular/plural mismatch 'river' should be 'rivers', misuse of 'so and', incorrect article 'the sunset' and unclear pronoun reference. Suggestions: use 'those in urban areas' for clear comparison, pluralize 'rivers', remove 'so and', use 'they are' to refer to areas, and use 'at sunset' instead of 'during the sunset'.

× I prefer views on other countries because umm, I have almost visited all the tourist places in India and I have been recently to Canada.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I have almost visited all the tourist places in India, and I have recently been to Canada.

Use 'in other countries' not 'on'. 'I have almost visited' is awkward; 'I have visited almost all the tourist places' is better, but kept minimal change here. 'I have been recently to Canada' has incorrect word order; use 'I have recently been to Canada'. Suggestion: move 'recently' before 'been' and change 'on' to 'in'.

× It is such a wonderful place and I'm a person who likes to explore a lot, so I do prefer visiting other countries than my country.

✓ It is such a wonderful place, and I'm a person who likes to explore a lot, so I do prefer visiting other countries rather than my own country.

Use 'rather than' for comparisons, and 'my own country' is more natural than 'my country'. Also add a comma before 'and'. Suggestion: replace 'than' with 'rather than' and add 'own' for clarity.