Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid tense mistakes and fillers, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Focus on correct verb tense and remove unnecessary words.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, when I went on holiday last summer I took many landscape shots and shared them with my friends on social media, which led to a lot of positive comments.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence, correct grammar (singular/plural and articles), avoid fillers, and explain specifically why you prefer urban views using linking words and examples.

예시: I prefer photographing urban areas because they offer diverse architecture and lively street scenes. For instance, the contrast between modern skyscrapers and historic buildings provides interesting compositions and candid moments of daily life.

제안: Respond directly, use past tense correctly for past trips, avoid vague words like ‘vibes’ without explanation, and give a clear reason with a specific example. Keep to 2–3 sentences maximum.

예시: I prefer photographing views in other countries because travel exposes me to different cultures and scenery. For example, when I visited Japan last year I photographed shrines and busy streets, which allowed me to capture scenes I cannot find at home.

× I love capturing the picture when I was, uh, in a holiday and I love the sharing my picture to my social media and to my friends and yeah.

✓ I love capturing pictures when I am on holiday, and I love sharing my pictures on social media and with my friends.

Errors: 'capturing the picture when I was, uh, in a holiday' mixes past tense with a general preference and uses incorrect article and verb form; 'the sharing my picture' uses unnecessary definite article and wrong verb form; 'to my social media and to my friends' uses incorrect preposition and singular/plural issues. Correction: use present simple for habitual actions ('I love capturing'), plural 'pictures' for general reference, 'on holiday' is the correct preposition, remove 'the' before 'sharing' and use gerund 'sharing' as object of 'love', plural 'pictures', and use 'on social media' and 'with my friends' for correct prepositions. Suggestion: keep tense consistent (present simple) for habits, use gerund after 'love', and use proper prepositions and plural nouns when speaking generally.

× I love taking a picture in urban areas because umm, in my eyes urban areas is so authentic and it's so traditional place and that's it.

✓ I love taking pictures in urban areas because, in my eyes, urban areas are so authentic and they are such traditional places.

Errors: 'a picture in urban areas' mixes singular with plural noun 'areas'; 'urban areas is' shows subject-verb number mismatch and 'it's so traditional place' uses singular with missing article and incorrect adjective phrase. Correction: use plural 'pictures' to match 'areas', change verb to 'are' for plural subject, use 'they are such traditional places' to correctly describe multiple areas. Suggestion: ensure noun number agrees with determiners and verbs; match singular/plural consistently and use 'such' + plural noun for emphasis.

× I really love taking pictures in urban area.

✓ I really love taking pictures in urban areas.

Error: 'urban area' is singular while context and previous sentence refer to areas in general; plural fits the general statement. Suggestion: use plural 'areas' when speaking about a type of place in general.

× In my eyes, uh, I prefer to take a picture in other countries because one year ago I went to Japan and I see uh do a sightseeing and I really like the vibes and situation in Japan.

✓ In my opinion, I prefer taking pictures in other countries because one year ago I went to Japan and did some sightseeing, and I really liked the vibes and the atmosphere there.

Errors: 'I prefer to take a picture in other countries' awkward phrase and singular/plural inconsistency; 'I see uh do a sightseeing' incorrectly mixes present and infinitive and uses wrong verbs; tense inconsistency ('went' is past, but 'see' and 'do' are present); 'I really like' should be past 'liked' to match 'went'. Correction: use 'prefer taking pictures' for habitual preference, 'did some sightseeing' for past activity, and 'liked' for past feeling; 'situation' replaced by 'atmosphere' for natural collocation. Suggestion: keep past tense for completed past events, use natural collocations like 'do sightseeing' -> 'did some sightseeing' and maintain number agreement.

× So I prefer to second picture in other countries than my countries.

✓ So I prefer to take pictures in other countries rather than in my country.

Errors: 'prefer to second picture' is ungrammatical and 'my countries' uses plural incorrectly; 'second' likely a mistaken word. Correction: 'prefer to take pictures in other countries rather than in my country' clearly expresses comparison and corrects number. Suggestion: use 'rather than' for comparisons, 'take pictures' for general action, and use singular 'my country' when referring to the speaker's own country.