Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and correct grammar: begin with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and unclear words. Focus on natural phrasing and correct noun use (e.g., "photographs of city scenes"), and stay within 3–4 sentences. Use linking words like "and" or "which" to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of city scenes because I like capturing the contrast between modern skyscrapers and older buildings. For example, I often photograph riverside streets and busy squares, which show the city’s energy and character.

제안: Start with a direct topic sentence stating your preference, then add one or two precise reasons. Reduce repetition (don’t repeat the same phrase), ensure plural agreement (e.g., "buildings"), and use linking words like "because" and "so" to show cause and effect. Keep answers to a maximum of 4–5 sentences.

예시: I prefer urban views because I enjoy photographing city skylines and architectural details. For instance, the way light and shadow fall on buildings creates interesting shapes and textures, so I can capture striking contrasts in my photos.

제안: Provide a clearer, grammatically correct topic sentence and limit to 3–4 sentences. Remove stuttering and repetitions ("because already because"). Use linking words like "because", "and", or "for example" to connect reasons and examples. Be specific about what differences you notice (e.g., styles, materials, colours) to enrich content.

예시: I prefer photographing views in other countries because traveling lets me see different cultures and architectural styles. For example, I like photographing historical buildings abroad, as they often use different materials and decorative details than those at home.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of photograph of the beautiful scenarios in the city.

✓ Yes, I like taking photographs of the beautiful scenes in the city.

The original sentence uses incorrect nouns and word forms: 'taking pictures of photograph' is redundant and ungrammatical; 'photographs' is the correct plural noun for images and 'scenarios' is awkward here — 'scenes' is the appropriate noun for views. Also 'beautiful' correctly modifies 'scenes'. Use plural 'photographs' to match 'taking'. Suggestion: Say 'taking photographs of the beautiful scenes' to be natural and grammatical.

× The pictures of the land, the skyscrapers and the architecture scenarios FA no show the excitement of the city that the city gives then for the country. Countryside.

✓ The pictures of the land, the skyscrapers and the architectural scenes show the excitement that the city brings to the country and countryside.

The original sentence has several structural issues and incoherent fragments: 'architecture scenarios FA no show' is ungrammatical and appears to be filler or misheard words, and 'that the city gives then for the country' is an unclear clause. Correct by using 'architectural scenes' and a clear verb 'show'. Use 'bring' to express the city contributing excitement to the country. Combine clauses into a single coherent sentence. Suggestion: Keep subject, verb and object order and remove extraneous fragments.

× I usually prefer urban views because I enjoy photographing the city skylines and architecture details, architectural details.

✓ I usually prefer urban views because I enjoy photographing city skylines and architectural details.

The repetition 'architecture details, architectural details' is redundant and 'architecture details' is not the preferred form; use the adjective 'architectural' to modify 'details'. Present tense 'usually prefer' and 'enjoy photographing' are consistent; just remove redundancy and use the correct adjective form.

× The interplay of light and shadow on building creates interesting shapes and colors and texture that are fun to capture with my camera.

✓ The interplay of light and shadow on buildings creates interesting shapes, colours and textures that are fun to capture with my camera.

Use plural 'buildings' because the interplay can occur on multiple structures and to match plural nouns 'shapes, colours and textures'. Also 'colour' spelling can be 'color' depending on variety; here Canadian English accepts 'colours'. Ensure nouns 'shapes, colours and textures' are plural to agree with 'interesting'. 'Creates' is correct for singular 'interplay', so keep verb form. Suggestion: Make nouns plural and add commas for clarity.

× I prefer views from other countries because already because I'm already familiar with the sceneries At home, traveling let me see different cultures and experience new climates.

✓ I prefer views from other countries because I'm already familiar with the scenery at home; traveling lets me see different cultures and experience new climates.

Use 'scenery' (uncountable) rather than 'sceneries'. Remove duplicate 'because'. 'At home' should be lowercase and connected to the clause. 'Traveling' (or 'travelling' in Canadian English) requires the singular verb 'lets' to agree with the singular gerund acting as subject; use 'lets' not 'let'. Maintain present tense consistency. Suggestion: Use 'scenery' and correct verb agreement with 'lets'.

× I meet new people and take pictures of various landscape and architectures.

✓ I meet new people and take pictures of various landscapes and architectural structures.

Use plural 'landscapes' for multiple views, and 'architectural structures' or simply 'architecture' rather than the plural 'architectures', which is not standard. 'Various' should modify a plural noun. Suggestion: Use 'various landscapes and architecture' or 'various landscapes and architectural structures'.

× For example, I enjoy taking pictures of historical buildings abroad because they are quite different from those in my country.

✓ For example, I enjoy taking pictures of historical buildings abroad because they are quite different from those in my country.

This sentence is already grammatically correct. 'Historical' correctly modifies 'buildings' and the comparison 'different from those in my country' is appropriate. No correction needed.