Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is natural and communicates the idea well, but it's slightly repetitive and a bit long. Improve by giving a clear topic sentence, one concise reason, and a brief specific example. Use a linking phrase to connect idea and example.

예시: Yes, I do. I often photograph scenes so I don't forget special moments. For example, when I visit a seaside town I take photos of the sunrise to remember the colours and the peaceful atmosphere.

제안: Good content and clear preference, but language is slightly unclear and contains repetition and small grammatical issues. Make the structure tighter: state preference, give two specific details, and one reason, using linking words like 'because' and 'for example.'

예시: I prefer rural views because I enjoy natural scenery. For instance, mountains, rivers and green fields calm me and help me relax after a busy week.

제안: The answer states a preference but is somewhat repetitive and ends abruptly. Improve by giving a clear topic sentence, two concise reasons with specific examples, and finish the thought. Check grammar (e.g., 'easy to access') and avoid unfinished sentences.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because public spaces are generally well maintained and clean. For example, parks and waterfronts are easy to access, so I can relax or take photos whenever I want.

× Yes indeed, I love taking pictures because I tend to forget.

✓ Yes indeed, I love taking pictures because I tend to forget things.

The original sentence omits the object 'things' after 'forget.' This is not strictly a present participle error but fits 'Verb in the present participle form' only if the verb requires an object; here 'forget' (base verb) needs an object to be clear. Add 'things' to complete the verb's meaning and make the sentence natural. Suggestion: Include an appropriate object after verbs like 'forget' to clarify what is forgotten.

× So in order for me to capture it and make sure that everything is in place, I will take pictures so that I can appreciate the moment, the scenery.

✓ So in order to capture it and make sure everything is in place, I take pictures so that I can appreciate the moment and the scenery.

The phrase 'in order for me to capture' is wordy; use 'in order to capture' for correct infinitive use. Also 'I will take pictures' shifts tense unnecessarily; present simple 'I take pictures' is more natural when stating a habitual action. Change 'the moment, the scenery' to 'the moment and the scenery' for parallelism. Suggestion: Use 'in order to + verb' for purpose and keep tense consistent for habitual actions (present simple).

× I prefer the rural area because I appreciate the scenery so much.

✓ I prefer rural areas because I appreciate the scenery so much.

Using 'the rural area' makes the phrase uncountable or overly specific. Since the speaker refers generally to rural settings, use the plural 'rural areas' or no article. This matches general preference statements. Suggestion: Use plural or zero article for general categories (rural areas).

× The views of the the idea of the greeneries, the mountains, the river, everything nature.

✓ I mean the views: the greenery, the mountains, the river — everything related to nature.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and fragmented ('The views of the the idea of the greeneries...'). Duplicate 'the' and 'greeneries' is an incorrect noun form. Recast as a clarification with a colon and list items. Use 'greenery' (uncountable) or 'green areas' instead of 'greeneries.' Suggestion: Avoid redundant phrases; use clear nouns and parallel lists when enumerating elements.

× It makes me calm and it soothes my mood.

✓ They make me calm and soothe my mood.

Subject-verb agreement and pronoun reference: 'It' is ambiguous for plural 'views' or 'nature.' If referring to multiple elements (views, nature), use plural pronoun 'they' and plural verb 'make.' Also 'it soothes my mood' repeats subject; combine: 'they make me calm and soothe my mood.' Suggestion: Ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents and coordinate verbs appropriately.

× I prefer the view in my country because it doesn't matter whether it's in the rural area or the urban area, everything is well maintained, it's clean and it's very easy accessible.

✓ I prefer views in my country because it doesn't matter whether they are in rural or urban areas; everything is well maintained, clean, and very easily accessible.

Use plural 'views' for general statement and avoid 'the' before 'rural area' and 'urban area.' 'It's very easy accessible' is incorrect: use the adverb 'easily' and plural agreement 'they are.' Also join clauses with a semicolon or conjunction. Suggestion: Use plural nouns for generalizations, remove unnecessary definite articles, and use adverb 'easily' with 'accessible.'

× So whenever I wanted to feel like so whenever I.

✓ So whenever I want to feel that way, I take pictures.

The original is an incomplete and repetitive fragment ('whenever I wanted to feel like so whenever I'). Correct by making a complete clause in present tense to match habitual action: 'whenever I want to feel that way, I take pictures.' Suggestion: Avoid repetition and ensure sentences are complete clauses with subject and verb; keep consistent tense for habitual habits.