Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Focus on correct grammar, natural expressions, and clarity. Begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid idioms used incorrectly ("my cup of tree"), and limit to 3–4 concise sentences. Use present simple consistently ("I like taking pictures"), correct verb forms ("taking pictures is my cup of tea"), and link supporting details with words like "because" or "so". Also be specific about what kinds of views you enjoy and why.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. When I travel or find a beautiful spot, I usually take photos to record the moment because they help me remember how I felt. For example, I often photograph sunsets and mountain scenes on my phone so I can look back at them later.

제안: Make your main preference clear with one direct sentence, then add specific reasons with correct vocabulary. Avoid inaccurate or awkward phrases ("busy village site" for rural) and incorrect facts ("natural carbon dioxide" phrasing). Use linking words such as "because", "for example", or "also". Keep to 2–3 sentences and give concrete details — e.g., types of scenery, feelings, or activities you like there.

예시: I prefer rural views because the countryside has wide green fields and quiet scenery that I find relaxing. For example, I like photographing tree-lined lanes and rivers in villages, which feels healthier and calmer than noisy city streets.

제안: Answer directly and avoid repetition and filler words. Start with a clear sentence: "I prefer views in my own country." Give 1–2 specific reasons and a brief example or memory to support your view. Correct grammar ("I was born here", "my country is vibrant"). Use linking words such as "because" and "for example" to structure your reply and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because I feel a strong connection to its landscapes and culture. For example, when I visit the coastal towns where I grew up, I feel happy and nostalgic because the scenery reminds me of childhood holidays.

× Definitely taking picture is my cup of tree.

✓ Definitely taking pictures is my cup of tea.

The original has two problems: 'taking picture' should be plural 'taking pictures' (singular/plural issue: ID 1) because we talk about the activity in general. 'Cup of tree' is an incorrect idiom; the correct idiom is 'cup of tea' (word choice/phrase error). Use the plural when referring to taking photos generally and use the correct idiom to convey preference. (Grammar problem type ID: 1)

× Whenever I get a nice place or when I travel I at the time I try to take picture.

✓ Whenever I find a nice place or when I travel, I try to take pictures.

Problems: 'get a nice place' is unnatural; 'find a nice place' or 'come across a nice place' is better (sentence structure: ID 26). 'I at the time I' is redundant and incorrect; remove extra phrase and add a comma after the subordinate clause. 'Take picture' needs plural 'pictures' (singular/plural issue: ID 1). Keep present simple for habitual action (tense: ID 6). (Grammar problem type ID: 26)

× It's allow me to to take memories in a in my phone or camera.

✓ It allows me to keep memories on my phone or camera.

Errors: 'It's allow' is wrong because subject 'it' with present simple requires third person singular verb 'allows' (third person singular issue: ID 2 and subject-verb agreement: ID 27). 'to to' has a duplicated 'to' (sentence structure: ID 26). 'Take memories' is not idiomatic; 'keep memories' or 'save memories' is better. Use 'on my phone' rather than 'in a in my phone' (preposition errors: ID 11). (Grammar problem type ID: 2)

× Also when I missed this time I can watch this picture and feel how I was thinking.

✓ Also, when I miss those moments, I can look at the pictures and remember what I was thinking.

Errors: 'when I missed this time' mixes past tense with present ability; use 'when I miss those moments' for a general statement (tense issue: ID 6/5). 'Watch this picture' is incorrect verb choice; we 'look at' or 'view' pictures (verb choice/adverb issue: ID 13). 'Feel how I was thinking' is awkward; use 'remember what I was thinking' for clarity. Also adjust plurality 'pictures' (singular/plural issue: ID 1). (Grammar problem type ID: 6)

× I prefer rural areas views because rural area is like a busy village site and this side always green sceneries are really amazing.

✓ I prefer rural views because rural areas are full of greenery and the scenery is really amazing.

Problems: 'rural areas views' has incorrect word order and redundancy; use 'rural views' or 'views of rural areas' (sentence structure: ID 26). 'Rural area is like a busy village site' is unclear; subject-verb and article usage are off—use 'rural areas are full of greenery' for a clearer generalization (singular/plural: ID 1, article error: ID 22). 'Green sceneries' is uncountable/unnatural; use 'the scenery' or 'greenery' (incorrect use of adjectives/nouns: ID 13). (Grammar problem type ID: 1)

× There have natural things like green trees, also natural, uh, carbon dioxide, which is really very beneficial for our health.

✓ There are natural things like green trees and fresh air, which are very beneficial for our health.

Errors: 'There have' is incorrect; the correct structure is 'There are' (There be issue: ID 3). 'Natural, uh, carbon dioxide' is inaccurate and misleading—carbon dioxide is not typically described as a beneficial inhalant; 'fresh air' or 'oxygen' is better (word choice/accuracy). Use plural agreement 'which are' to match plural subject 'trees and fresh air' (subject-verb agreement: ID 27). Remove filler 'uh' in formal responses. (Grammar problem type ID: 3)

× I prefer you in my own country because I truly believe that my country is really amazing country.

✓ I prefer my own country because I truly believe that it is really amazing.

Issues: 'I prefer you in my own country' is incorrect pronoun use; likely intended 'I prefer to be in my own country' or simply 'I prefer my own country' (incorrect use of pronouns: ID 12). 'Amazing country' needs an article or rephrasing—'it is really amazing' works better (article error: ID 22). Keep concise phrasing. (Grammar problem type ID: 12)

× Also, whenever I think about my country, I feel elated.

✓ Also, whenever I think about my country, I feel elated.

This sentence is grammatically correct. It uses the present simple appropriately for habitual feelings (present tense: ID 6). No change needed. (Grammar problem type ID: 6)

× Moreover, my country is uh, it's, it's my vibrant country.

✓ Moreover, my country is vibrant and full of life.

Problems: 'uh, it's, it's' contains hesitation and unnecessary repetition; remove fillers and repetition (sentence structure: ID 26). Saying 'my vibrant country' is redundant after 'my country is'; use an adjective phrase 'vibrant and full of life' for natural expression. Avoid fillers in responses. (Grammar problem type ID: 26)

× I born here and when I was child, I really like my areas.

✓ I was born here, and when I was a child, I really liked my neighborhood.

Errors: 'I born here' lacks the auxiliary 'was' and needs passive past participle 'was born' (verb in past participle form: ID 9 and past tense issue: ID 5). 'When I was child' needs the article 'a' ('a child') (article error: ID 22). 'I really like my areas' mixes tenses and uses 'areas' awkwardly; use past tense 'liked' to match 'when I was a child' and a more natural noun 'neighborhood' or 'area' (present/past tense issue: ID 5 and singular/plural: ID 1). (Grammar problem type ID: 9)