Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples using linking words. Avoid filler phrases and unclear references (e.g., "the view that I haven't seen").

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing unusual or striking views. For example, I often take pictures of coastal scenes and sunsets because the changing light creates dramatic colors and reflections. Also, I like to capture anything that looks different from what I normally see to remember the moment.

제안: Provide a direct topic sentence stating your preference or say you like both, then give clear reasons with linking words (e.g., "because", "however"). Reduce repetition and improve fluency.

예시: I like both urban and rural views because each offers something different. For instance, I enjoy cityscapes for their energy and architecture, whereas countryside views are relaxing and full of natural beauty. So depending on my mood, I choose one or the other.

제안: Answer directly and avoid hesitations. Use linking words to contrast (e.g., "but", "however") and give specific examples of what you photograph at home versus abroad. Correct nouns and plural forms ("architecture", "pictures").

예시: It depends on the location, but generally I photograph natural landscapes at home and architectural or cultural scenes abroad. For example, at home I often photograph mountains and beaches, whereas when I travel I focus on historic buildings and unique city details.

× Yes, for me if the view that I haven't seen or is it different from the usual 1.

✓ Yes, for me, if the view is one I haven't seen before or is different from the usual, I will take a picture.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and extra words ('is it', '1'), causing a sentence structure error. Also 'haven't seen' needs to be in a clause modifying 'view' ('a view I haven't seen before'). Suggestion: place clauses in natural order and remove filler words; use 'will' or 'would' consistently with the speaker's intent.

× So I would definitely take a picture some kind of like the view from the sea or the changing of the lights on the sky or something beautiful that capturing my sight.

✓ So I would definitely take a picture of views like the view from the sea, the changing lights in the sky, or anything beautiful that catches my eye.

Errors include missing preposition 'of' after 'take a picture', incorrect article use ('the changing of the lights on the sky'), and wrong verb form 'capturing' instead of 'catches'. These are article and preposition/verb form issues. Suggestion: use 'take a picture of', use 'in the sky' not 'on the sky', and use active verb 'catches' to describe what attracts attention.

× Actually, it depends on the mood at that time and it also depends on the view that is occurring at that moment.

✓ Actually, it depends on my mood at that time and also on the view that is happening at that moment.

The phrase 'mood at that time' is acceptable but 'the view that is occurring' is awkward; 'happening' is a better present continuous choice. This is a present tense usage improvement. Suggestion: use natural collocations like 'depends on my mood' and 'the view that is happening'.

× I don't mind whether I prefer the view from the urban area or in the suburb area, but it depends.

✓ I don't mind whether the view is in an urban area or in the suburbs, but it depends.

Problems: incorrect use of 'prefer' (redundant), incorrect article 'the suburb area' and preposition choice. This is a preposition/article error. Suggestion: say 'in an urban area' and 'in the suburbs' or 'in a suburban area'.

× For me it depends on the location that uh.

✓ For me, it depends on the location.

'that uh' is filler and makes the sentence incomplete; also punctuation needed. This is an article/ sentence structure cleanup. Suggestion: remove filler and finish the sentence clearly.

× I would usually take a picture of the natural views in my home country, but for some trips that I went to foreign countries I usually take a pictures of some arti architecture or something new.

✓ I usually take pictures of natural views in my home country, but on trips to foreign countries I usually take pictures of architecture or anything new.

Multiple errors: 'take a picture of the natural views' mixes singular/plural and article use; 'take a pictures' is incorrect pluralization; 'arti architecture' is a typo; 'for some trips that I went to foreign countries' is awkward. These are singular/plural and article errors plus sentence structure. Suggestion: use 'take pictures' (plural) when speaking generally, 'on trips to foreign countries' for correct phrase, and 'architecture' without extra words.