Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail using clear linking words. Avoid hesitations and repetition. Focus on correct word choice (e.g., "photos of different viewpoints" instead of "taking features") and simpler tense consistency.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos from different viewpoints because each angle shows a new aspect. For example, photographing a tower from its base emphasizes height, while shooting from the top highlights the surrounding cityscape.

제안: Give a clear direct answer (urban or rural) then explain with one or two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., "because", "for example"). Reduce repetition and avoid unclear phrases like "cut out the top". Use correct prepositions ("from the top of a building").

예시: I prefer views in urban areas because tall buildings create dramatic skylines. For example, from the top of a skyscraper you can see the whole city stretched out, which I find exciting.

제안: Answer directly and avoid unnecessary phrases like "I have seen that". Use linking words to show contrast (e.g., "because", "so") and give specific examples. Correct collocations ("attracted to", "different photos of") and remove filler words like "Wow".

예시: I prefer views in other countries because I'm used to the scenery at home and want new experiences. For example, I enjoy photographing waterfalls and famous festivals abroad because they offer unique scenes I cannot find locally.

× I really enjoy taking features of the different views because when I take pictures in different views, I can get a different aspect of the picture.

✓ I really enjoy taking pictures of different views because when I take pictures from different angles, I can get different aspects of the scene.

The student used 'taking features of the different views' which is incorrect word choice and structure. 'Taking pictures of' is correct; 'from different angles' or 'from different viewpoints' correctly uses prepositions and nouns. Also 'a different aspect' should be plural 'different aspects' to match generalization. Suggestion: use 'take pictures of' and 'from different angles' for clarity and correct collocation.

× But the scenery is, was very, is very, was very different.

✓ But the scenery was very different.

The student mixed present and past verb forms ('is, was'). The examiner question asks generally about experience; past tense 'was' or present 'is' should be chosen consistently. Use 'was' when referring to a specific past moment; use one tense only. Suggestion: decide on tense and avoid repeating forms.

× if I just take a picture about tower, I can take it on the bottom of the tower and the top of the tower.

✓ If I just take a picture of a tower, I can take it from the bottom of the tower and from the top of the tower.

Incorrect prepositions: 'about tower' should be 'of a tower'; 'on the bottom' should be 'from the bottom' to indicate viewpoint. Also include an article 'a' before 'tower'. Suggestion: use 'picture of' and 'from the bottom/top' to indicate shooting positions.

× I prefer views in the rural, uh, urban areas because there are many tall, many tall buildings.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because there are many tall buildings.

The phrase 'in the rural, uh, urban areas' is confused; choose either 'rural' or 'urban'. Also 'in urban areas' is the correct prepositional phrase. Repetition 'many tall, many tall' is redundant. Suggestion: pick one setting and avoid repetition.

× And I, when I, when I enter into a building and cut out the top and top, I can, I can see this city scenery at on the top of the building and.

✓ When I go up a building and reach the top, I can see the city scenery from there.

The original sentence is disfluent and contains incorrect verbs and prepositions: 'enter into a building and cut out the top' is incorrect. Use 'go up' or 'go to the top' and 'see the city scenery from the top'. Remove repeated fragments and trailing 'and'. Suggestion: simplify the structure: subject + verb + location + result.

× I have seen that I prefer views in other countries because other countries are very attracting to me because I get accustomed to the the scenery in my country.

✓ I find that I prefer views in other countries because they are very attractive to me since I am accustomed to the scenery in my country.

'I have seen that' is awkward; 'I find that' is more natural. 'Other countries are very attracting to me' uses incorrect adjective form; use 'attractive'. Pronoun 'they' can replace 'other countries' to avoid repetition. 'I get accustomed to the the scenery' needs 'am accustomed to the scenery' and remove duplicate 'the'. Suggestion: use 'find that', 'attractive', and 'am accustomed to' for correct verb and adjective forms.

× So I tend to go to another country to take a different photos like the waterfalls or like some famous exhibition activity.

✓ So I tend to go to other countries to take different photos, like waterfalls or some famous exhibitions or events.

Problems: 'go to another country' should be plural 'other countries' to match general preference; 'a different photos' mixes singular article with plural noun — use 'different photos'. 'the waterfalls' unnecessary article; 'some famous exhibition activity' is awkward — use 'exhibitions' or 'events'. Suggestion: match number between article and noun and choose natural collocations.

× Wow, that is a very worth for me to take.

✓ Wow, that is something very worthwhile for me to take photos of.

'a very worth' is incorrect; 'worthwhile' is the correct adjective. Also need to specify 'to take photos of' or 'to photograph'. Suggestion: use 'worthwhile' or 'worth visiting' and include a clear object for 'take'.