Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct basic grammar (plural/singular, verb forms) and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different kinds of views, especially natural scenes. For example, I often photograph mountains and trees during sunrise because the light makes the colors richer, and I also like taking close-ups of birds to capture their details.

제안: Give a direct answer first, then two specific reasons linked clearly. Use correct vocabulary (rural, fresh air) and avoid hesitations and repeated words. Keep to 2–3 sentences maximum.

예시: I prefer rural views because I enjoy the fresh air and wide green spaces. For instance, I like morning walks in the countryside where the scenery is calm and birdsong is everywhere, which makes me feel relaxed.

제안: Answer directly, then give specific reasons with linking words. Fix grammar (possessives, verb agreement) and reduce repetition. Mention one concrete example to support your preference.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because I know the beautiful places well and feel a strong connection to them. For example, I often visit a nearby national park with colorful wildflowers and scenic trails, so I can photograph familiar spots in different seasons.

× Yes, I like to take pictures in different ways and views like some scenarios, some nature scenarios especially and it's very good.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different scenes, especially natural ones; it's very enjoyable.

The student used infinitive 'to take' which is acceptable, but 'like taking' is more natural when referring to a hobby. 'Views like some scenarios' is awkward; 'scenes' is the correct noun. 'Nature scenarios' is redundant; 'natural ones' is clearer. 'It's very good' is vague — 'very enjoyable' is more appropriate. Use of present participle 'taking' fits habitual action.

× And mostly I like the views of mountains, trees, birds, they they looks very pretty.

✓ Mostly I like the views of mountains, trees, and birds; they look very pretty.

The original has punctuation/run-on issues and a subject-verb agreement error: plural subject 'they' requires verb 'look' not 'looks'. Remove duplicated 'they' and add commas or a semicolon to separate clauses. Use plural verb for plural subject.

× I prefer ruler radius mostly because there is a fresh air of nature.

✓ I prefer rural areas mostly because there is fresh air and nature.

The student used incorrect words 'ruler radius' instead of 'rural areas'. 'There is a fresh air of nature' is ungrammatical: 'fresh air' is uncountable so no article 'a', and 'and nature' conveys intended meaning. Correct pronouns/words and articles.

× There is a more lot of green ray and, and the morning walk.

✓ There is a lot more greenery, and the mornings are great for walking.

'More lot of' is incorrect; correct quantifier is 'a lot of' or 'a lot more'. 'Green ray' is incorrect noun — use 'greenery'. 'The morning walk' is awkward; express as 'mornings are great for walking'. Tense/number adjusted to fit habitual statement.

× I, I like it very much. And there was also, uh, everything is actually very fresh. So I feel very, very. Good.

✓ I like it very much. Everything there is very fresh, so I feel very good.

The sentence has repetition, filler words, inconsistent tenses ('there was' vs 'is'), and fragmented 'very, very. Good.' Maintain present simple for general preference: 'Everything there is very fresh'. Remove filler and combine into a clear sentence.

× I mostly prefer our country because it our country is very beautiful as have a lot of green rays, we have a lot of lot of colours and I like most it well and I know the views, I know the places very well so I prefer my country.

✓ I mostly prefer my country because it is very beautiful, with a lot of greenery and many colors. I like it a lot and I know the views and places well, so I prefer my country.

Pronoun/possessive errors: use 'my country' not 'our country' when speaking personally. Missing verb 'is' after 'it'. 'Green rays' is incorrect — use 'greenery'. Repetition 'a lot of lot of' removed. Word order corrected: 'I like it a lot' instead of 'I like most it well'. Split into clearer sentences, keeping present simple for general preference.