Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Говорите более грамотно и полно: используйте правильные времена, артикли и структуру предложений. Дайте одну главную причину, затем добавьте 1–2 конкретных примера, избегая лишних слов. Например, исправьте “I'm teenager” на “I'm a teenager” и “I like post” на “I like to post”.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I'm a teenager and I like to post photos on my Instagram account. For example, I often photograph city skylines and nearby mountains, which get a lot of positive comments.

제안: Упорядочьте мысль: сначала назовите предпочтение, затем обоснуйте причину и приведите конкретный пример. Исправьте грамматику (например, “I prefer urban areas”, “I live in Almaty”) и завершайте предложение. Избегайте повторов и неоконченных фраз.

예시: I prefer views in urban areas because I live in Almaty, a big city in Kazakhstan. For instance, my city has large mountains close by, so I can easily visit a viewpoint and take photos without traveling far.

제안: Сформулируйте чёткое предпочтение или скажите, что вам нравятся оба варианта, и объясните почему, с конкретикой. Избегайте общих фраз типа “so beautiful” без деталей; улучшите согласование (например, “both my country and others appeal to me because…”).

예시: I like views in both my country and abroad because each place offers different scenery. For example, Kazakhstan has vast steppes and mountains, while other countries might have coastal landscapes that I don't have at home.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I'm teenager and I like post different photos in my Instagram account.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I'm a teenager and I like to post different photos on my Instagram account.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'teenager' and uses incorrect verb form 'post' after 'like'. Use 'like to post' or 'like posting'. Also use the preposition 'on' with 'Instagram account'. Suggestions: add 'a' before nouns for occupations/ages, use 'like to + base verb' or 'like + gerund', and use 'on' for platforms.

× I prefer use in urban areas because I live in the big city in Kazakhstan, I live in Amati and so that in my city have a lot of big and bigger mountains, I can go to the middle and.

✓ I prefer urban areas because I live in a big city in Kazakhstan; I live in Almaty, and in my city there are many large mountains, so I can go to them easily.

Multiple errors: 'prefer use in urban areas' is incorrect — 'prefer urban areas' is correct. 'the big city' should be 'a big city'. City name misspelled: 'Amati' -> 'Almaty'. The clause 'in my city have a lot of' lacks subject and verb; use 'there are many'. 'big and bigger mountains' is awkward; use 'large mountains' or 'many big mountains'. 'I can go to the middle and.' is incomplete; likely meant 'I can go to them easily' or 'I can go to the mountains'. Suggestions: remove unnecessary words, ensure subject-verb presence, use correct plural forms and articles, and complete clauses.

× I think I prefer in my country and other country because yours is so beautiful, nature is so beautiful and the different types of views, it's so good.

✓ I think I prefer my country and other countries because yours is very beautiful; the nature is beautiful and there are many different types of views, which are great.

Problems: unnecessary prepositions 'in' after 'prefer' — use 'prefer my country and other countries'. 'other country' should be plural 'other countries'. 'yours is so beautiful' is unclear; use 'yours is very beautiful' referring to 'your country'. 'the different types of views, it's so good' has agreement and structure errors: use 'there are many different types of views, which are great'. Suggestions: ensure correct use of 'prefer', match singular/plural nouns, and make relative clause agree with plural 'types'.