Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: ปรับความชัดเจนและไวยากรณ์: พูดประโยคหัวข้อให้ตรงคำถาม เช่น ‘Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views.’ ลดการทำซ้ำและแก้การใช้คำผิด เช่น ‘captures’ → ‘capture’, ‘pick up them’ → ‘look at them’. เพิ่มรายละเอียดสั้นๆ โดยใช้อีก 1–2 ประโยคสนับสนุนด้วย linking word เช่น ‘because’ หรือ ‘so’ และไม่เกิน 5 ประโยคทั้งหมด.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. I like to capture memorable moments because looking at the pictures later helps me feel calm and relaxed when I am sad.

제안: แก้ความซ้ำและโครงสร้าง: ตอบตรงๆ ด้วยประโยคหัวข้อ เช่น ‘I prefer rural areas.’ ลบคำซ้ำ และใช้ linking word เพื่ออธิบายเหตุผล เช่น ‘because’ หรือ ‘as’. ปรับไวยากรณ์ของประโยคสนับสนุน (ตัวอย่าง: ‘they give me a sense of relief’). ระวังการใช้คำว่า ‘experience’ ให้เหมาะสม เช่น ‘visit’ หรือ ‘be in’.

예시: I prefer rural areas to urban ones because they are quieter and less crowded. For example, being surrounded by nature helps me relax and sleep better after a busy week.

제안: แก้ความไม่ชัดและศัพท์ผิด: ตอบให้ชัดเจนว่า ‘other countries’ หรือระบุชื่อประเทศได้ แต่ต้องใช้ไวยากรณ์ถูก เช่น ‘I prefer views in other countries, especially China.’ หลีกเลี่ยงคำพูดติดอืด (‘uh’) และคำที่ไม่เหมาะสม (‘explode’). ให้รายละเอียดเฉพาะเจาะจงมากขึ้น เช่นชื่อสถานที่หรือเหตุผลว่าทำไมสนใจประเทศนั้น และจำกัดไม่เกิน 5 ประโยค.

예시: I prefer views in other countries, especially China, because its landscapes and historic landmarks look fascinating. For instance, I would love to see the Great Wall and traditional gardens, which I have admired on TV and travel shows.

× Yes, I prefer to captures all of remarkable memory in a in in a in a will.

✓ Yes, I prefer to capture all of the remarkable memories in a...

The verb captures is incorrect because after prefer we use the base verb form (prefer to capture). 'memory' should be plural 'memories' to match 'all of'. Also 'a in a...' is filler; keep a natural phrase like 'in my phone' or 'in an album'. Suggestion: use 'prefer to capture' + plural noun 'memories' and replace the repetitive filler with a clear noun.

× So whenever I feel sad, I could pick up them and look at them so that I can feel a sense of relief.

✓ So whenever I feel sad, I can pick them up and look at them so that I feel a sense of relief.

Use 'can' (modal) instead of 'could' to match present habitual action. 'Pick up them' is incorrect word order; use 'pick them up'. Repeating 'can' is unnecessary; 'so that I feel' is more natural. Suggestion: use correct modal 'can' and correct object pronoun placement 'pick them up'.

× I prefer rural rural areas to urban area.

✓ I prefer rural areas to urban areas.

Duplicate word 'rural' should appear only once. 'Urban area' should be plural to match contrast with 'rural areas'. Suggestion: remove repetition and keep both nouns in the same number.

× The first reason would be whenever I experience a rural rural area I could it give me a sense of relief and making me feel comfortable.

✓ The first reason is that whenever I visit a rural area, it gives me a sense of relief and makes me feel comfortable.

Use 'is that' for explanation. 'Experience' is acceptable but 'visit' is more natural. Remove duplicate 'rural'. Use present simple 'gives' for habitual truth, not 'could'. 'it give' is wrong subject-verb agreement; use 'it gives'. Change 'making me feel' to 'makes me feel' for parallel structure. Suggestion: use 'is that' + present simple and ensure subject-verb agreement and parallel verbs.

× I will go for other country wheels, which is China.

✓ I would choose another country, which is China.

'Go for' is informal; 'choose' fits the question about preference. 'Other country wheels' is incorrect; use 'another country'. 'Which is China' correctly identifies the choice. Suggestion: use 'I would choose another country, China.' or 'I would go to another country, such as China.'

× I have seen it on TV and uh, variety where it's explode, uh, famous destinations of China and there are several landmark where.

✓ I have seen it on TV and on various programs showing famous destinations in China, and there are several landmarks there.

Use 'on various programs' instead of 'variety where it's explode'. 'Explode' is incorrect; perhaps intended 'popular' or 'famous'. 'Destinations of China' -> 'destinations in China'. 'Several landmark' needs plural 'landmarks' and 'there' instead of 'where'. Suggestion: use 'on TV' + 'various programs' and correct noun plurals and prepositions: 'landmarks there'.