Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is natural and enthusiastic, and you include personal detail which is good. To improve, make the reply more concise by removing repetition (e.g. avoid repeating 'absolutely' and 'beautiful'), add a brief linking phrase to structure the response, and limit to about 3–4 sentences. Also include a short reason why you enjoy it (emotion or purpose) to add specificity.

예시: Yes, I love taking pictures — it’s a hobby I’ve developed over the years because photography helps me capture moments and remember details. For example, when I see an impressive sky or a striking street scene I’ll stop to take a photo. Sometimes my friends find it annoying, but it’s important to me because photos help me preserve memories.

제안: Good direct response with a clear preference and reason. To reach a higher score, remove filler (‘Oh, that’s an interesting question’), use a linking word to connect reason and example, and give a specific example that illustrates what you find picturesque in rural scenes (e.g. fields, rivers, traditional houses). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I prefer rural views because they feel more peaceful and natural, and they often include elements like rolling fields, rivers and traditional cottages. For instance, I enjoy photographing morning mist over farmland since it creates a calm, picturesque scene.

제안: Your answer is balanced and acknowledges both sides, which is good. Improve by starting with a clear topic sentence (e.g. 'I prefer both for different reasons'), then give a specific example of what you appreciate in India and one example from abroad. Use a linking word such as 'however' to contrast. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: I enjoy views in both my country and abroad for different reasons. For example, India offers diverse scenes from colorful markets to rural landscapes, whereas other countries attract me for their well-preserved historical sites, such as medieval towns or ancient ruins.

× I absolutely love to take pictures.

✓ I absolutely love taking pictures.

When a verb follows 'love' to express enjoyment of an activity, the gerund (-ing) form is preferred. Use 'love taking' rather than 'love to take' for a more natural, idiomatic expression.

× It's a habit I have developed over years.

✓ It's a habit I have developed over the years.

The phrase 'over years' is missing the definite article 'the' when referring to a period of time up to now. Use 'over the years' to indicate experience accumulated across many years.

× Whenever I see a beautiful sky or a beautiful scenery walking down the street, I absolutely make sure that I stop and take a picture of it.

✓ Whenever I see a beautiful sky or beautiful scenery while walking down the street, I make sure I stop and take a picture.

The original sentence has awkward word order and article use: 'a beautiful scenery' is incorrect because 'scenery' is uncountable and should not take 'a'. 'Walking down the street' should be linked with 'while' to show simultaneous actions. Also, 'absolutely make sure that I stop' is wordy; simplify to 'make sure I stop' for clarity and naturalness.

× And this habit can sometimes annoy my friends, but it doesn't stop me from taking pictures.

✓ This habit can sometimes annoy my friends, but it doesn't stop me from taking pictures.

Starting a sentence with 'And' is informal and unnecessary in this context. The sentence is otherwise grammatically correct; removing 'And' improves formality and flow.

× I think I prefer views of rural areas more than urban because there's something quite peaceful and natural about rural areas, and I feel like it offers more picturesque views than urban.

✓ I think I prefer views of rural areas to urban ones because there's something peaceful and natural about the countryside, and I feel it offers more picturesque scenes than the city.

Problems: 'more than urban' is awkward; use 'to urban ones' for correct comparison. Repeating 'rural areas' is redundant; 'the countryside' is natural. 'It offers' should refer to 'the countryside' (singular), and 'picturesque views than urban' needs an object: 'than the city' or 'than urban areas'. Also adjust articles and word choice for clarity.

× I think every country has its own to offer.

✓ I think every country has its own things to offer.

The phrase 'has its own to offer' is incomplete; 'own' needs a noun ('things', 'attractions', etc.). Adding 'things' clarifies the object that countries offer.

× While India is a diverse place with a variety of views to offer ranging from rural to urban, I know that there's a lot of historical places in other parts of the world which are beautiful as well.

✓ While India is a diverse country with a variety of views ranging from rural to urban, I know there are many historical places in other parts of the world that are beautiful as well.

Issues: 'a diverse place' is acceptable but 'country' is more natural. 'A variety of views to offer ranging' is redundant—remove 'to offer' or reposition. 'A lot of historical places' should be 'many historical places' for formality, and use 'that' instead of 'which' for restrictive clause. Also adjust verb 'there's' to 'there are' to agree with the plural 'places'.