Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 답변이 긍정적이고 의미 전달은 되지만 문법 오류와 중복 표현이 많습니다. 문장을 간결하게 만들고 주제문 다음에 한두 개의 구체적 이유나 예를 연결해 자연스럽게 확장하세요. 예를 들어 동사 시제와 단수·복수 형태를 바로잡고, 'really'나 'I'의 반복을 피하며 연결어(for example, because, so)를 사용하세요. 또한 문장을 3~4개로 제한해 명확하게 말하세요.

예시: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking photos of different views because they capture unique moments and moods. For example, I often photograph city skylines at sunset to show the contrast between natural light and artificial lights. I try to take pictures whenever I travel so I can remember each place clearly.

제안: 의도를 알 수 있으나 문법과 어휘 선택이 부정확하고 반복이 많습니다. 명확한 주제문(도시/농촌 중 선택)으로 시작하고, 하나나 두 개의 구체적 이유를 논리적으로 연결어(with, because, so)로 설명하세요. 'urban area' 대신 'the city'나 'urban areas'처럼 자연스러운 표현을 사용하세요.

예시: I prefer views in urban areas because I like the vibrant atmosphere and variety of architectural styles. For instance, city streets often have interesting buildings, street art, and lively cafés that make photos more dynamic. Also, urban areas are more comfortable for me due to easy access to amenities.

제안: 의견은 전달되지만 표현이 모호하고 비교 설명이 부족합니다. 'other countries'를 선택했다면 왜 더 매력적인지 구체적으로 설명하세요(예: 문화적 차이, 건축양식, 풍경의 다양성). 또한 불필요한 반복을 제거하고 비교 구조(while, although, because)를 사용해 문장을 명확히 만드세요.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they offer different landscapes and cultural scenes that I haven’t seen before. For example, I enjoy photographing traditional markets and historic architecture abroad, which contrast with the familiar scenery at home. Although my country is beautiful, traveling gives me fresh perspectives and new subjects to capture.

× I like really like picture and view on view is beautiful.

✓ I really like pictures and the view is beautiful.

The sentence has redundant words and incorrect noun forms. Use the adverb 'really' before the verb 'like' and the plural 'pictures' for general preference. Add the article 'the' before 'view' to refer to a specific view. Improve by removing duplicate words and ordering: 'I really like pictures, and the view is beautiful.'

× I I I taking a picture always everywhere.

✓ I always take pictures everywhere.

This sentence contains repetition and incorrect verb form. Use the simple present 'take' for habitual action and place the frequency adverb 'always' before the main verb. Use the plural 'pictures' for general activities. Correct structure: subject + adverb + verb + object/place.

× I prefer, I prefer build in city area, city area because uh, I prefer is Urban Air, urban area because I think urban area is really comfortable for me.

✓ I prefer the built-up city areas because I think urban areas are really comfortable for me.

Multiple issues: 'build in city area' is incorrect — use 'built-up' or 'urban' to describe city areas. Use the definite article 'the' for 'built-up city areas' in this context. 'Urban Air' is likely a mispronunciation; replace with 'urban areas'. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'urban areas are'. Remove repeated phrases. Place adjectives before nouns and use plural consistently.

× I absolutely prefer views on other countries because umm my my my country own country is really beautiful, but another country is more beautiful and new.

✓ I absolutely prefer views in other countries because my own country is really beautiful, but other countries are newer and more beautiful.

Use the preposition 'in' with 'countries' (not 'on'). 'My own country' is the correct possessive phrase; remove repetitions. Use 'other countries' (plural) to match 'views in other countries'. Use comparative form 'more beautiful' and describe 'newer' rather than 'new' when comparing. Keep nouns and verbs in correct number agreement.