Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Mejorar la fluidez y la precisión gramatical eliminando muletillas (como 'uh') y corrigiendo tiempos y estructuras. Sea más conciso: comience con una frase temática clara, añada un detalle específico (por ejemplo, qué tipo de vistas le gustan y por qué) y limite la respuesta a 3–4 oraciones. Use conectores simples para cohesión (por ejemplo, 'because', 'so', 'when').

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views; it’s one of my favourite hobbies. I usually go hiking on Sundays, and when I reach a mountain summit I take photos of the valley and sunrise because the light there is spectacular. I find these natural scenes more inspiring than cityscapes.

제안: Evite repeticiones y muletillas; formule una oración temática clara luego sustente con razones específicas. Use conectores como 'because' o 'however' para mejorar la cohesión. Añada un ejemplo concreto (por ejemplo, a favourite rural scene) para enriquecer la respuesta.

예시: I prefer rural views because they offer calm and natural beauty. For example, I enjoy photographing morning sunrises over fields and mountains, where there are fewer people and more interesting natural details like mist and wildlife.

제안: Sea más directo: comience con la preferencia y explique por qué con detalles concretos (por ejemplo, tipos de monumentos o escenas culturales). Evite repeticiones y muletillas, y limite la respuesta a 2–3 oraciones. Use vocabulario preciso (e.g., 'historic monuments', 'urban architecture').

예시: I prefer views in other countries because I love discovering different cultures and architecture. For instance, I enjoy photographing historic monuments and vibrant street scenes abroad, which often offer visual details I don’t see at home.

× Yes, taking pictures of different views is one of my favorite, uh, hobbies.

✓ Yes, taking pictures of different views is one of my favorite hobbies.

The phrase 'one of my favorite, uh, hobbies' contains an unnecessary comma; more importantly, 'favorite hobbies' is correct plural noun usage. Remove the comma and keep 'hobbies' plural after 'favorite'. Suggestion: write 'one of my favorite hobbies' without the filler words and extra punctuation.

× On Sundays, uh, I used uh, to go uh, hiking and when I arrive at the top of the mountain, I love, uh, take photographs baths, but they are the best views, uh, you can find.

✓ On Sundays I used to go hiking, and when I arrived at the top of the mountain, I loved to take photographs because they were the best views you could find.

Multiple tense errors: 'used to go' is fine but should be followed by base verb 'hiking' without extra 'uh'. The clause 'when I arrive' mixes present with past; it should be past 'arrived' to match 'used to'. 'I love, uh, take photographs' is incorrect—use 'loved to take photographs' or 'I loved taking photographs'. 'bath s' seems like mispronounced 'because' and should be 'because'. Also 'they are the best views you can find' should match past 'were the best views you could find' when describing habitual past action. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and remove fillers.

× Depends on on the moment, but I think I prefer uh on, on rural areas, uh, because uh, urban city is always plenty of uh people.

✓ It depends on the moment, but I think I prefer rural areas because cities are always full of people.

Preposition and noun phrase errors: 'Depends on on the moment' needs subject 'It' and single 'on'. 'I prefer uh on, on rural areas' incorrectly repeats 'on' and uses 'on' with 'rural areas'—use 'prefer rural areas' without 'on'. 'urban city is always plenty of people' is ungrammatical: 'cities are always full of people' or 'urban areas are always full of people'. Suggestion: use 'It depends on the moment' and 'I prefer rural areas' and replace 'plenty of' with 'full of' for natural collocation.

× And I prefer uh, views of nature, the trees, the animals, the mountains, sunrises.

✓ And I prefer views of nature: trees, animals, mountains, and sunrises.

Article and list punctuation: 'the trees, the animals, the mountains, sunrises' inconsistently uses definite articles. In a general list, omit 'the' before each noun. Also add 'and' before the last item for clarity. Suggestion: use parallel structure 'trees, animals, mountains, and sunrises'.

× I prefer views in other countries, but because I love, uh, traveling, I love to discover other cities and cultures.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I love traveling; I enjoy discovering other cities and cultures.

Tense and register: 'but because I love, uh, traveling' has unnecessary 'but' before 'because'—use one connective. 'I love to discover' is grammatically acceptable but 'I enjoy discovering' is more natural. Suggestion: remove redundant conjunctions and choose consistent verbs for natural speech.

× And of course I like taking pictures of other cities. There's monuments, museums, all of kind of, uh, new things.

✓ And of course I like taking pictures of other cities: there are monuments, museums, and all kinds of new things.

Sentence structure and agreement: 'There's monuments' is subject-verb disagreement; use 'There are monuments'. 'all of kind of, uh, new things' is ungrammatical—correct form is 'all kinds of new things' or 'all of the kinds of new things'. Suggestion: use 'there are' with plural nouns and 'all kinds of' for the phrase.