Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., memorizing/my memory) and correct word choices (hand phone → phone).

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, when I travel I always photograph landscapes and street scenes so I can remember the trip later. Because photos capture details I might forget, I often review them at home to relive my experiences.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and give specific supporting details. Use linking words (for example/because) and correct vocabulary (e.g., 'rural areas', 'people enjoying their time'). Avoid filler words and repeat ideas only once.

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because I enjoy scenes of everyday life there. For example, I like watching farmers working in the fields and children playing in village streets, which feel peaceful and authentic.

제안: Provide a clear, grammatical response and specific examples. Use linking words (because/for example) and correct nouns (queues → views; police → [place name]). Combine ideas into one or two coherent sentences and avoid fragmented phrases like 'Hike mountains.'

예시: I prefer views in my own country because it offers a wide range of landscapes, from pink-sand beaches to majestic mountains. For example, popular destinations combine coastal scenery and hiking trails, so locals and tourists can enjoy both beach and mountain activities.

× I love to take pictures whenever I travel because it means a lot for me.

✓ I love to take pictures whenever I travel because it means a lot to me.

The correct preposition with 'means a lot' is 'to' not 'for'. Use 'to me' to indicate the person affected. Suggestion: memorize common verb–preposition pairs (e.g., 'mean to', 'belong to').

× Whenever I come back to my home, I can open my hand phone.

✓ Whenever I come back home, I can open my phone.

'My home' is grammatical but 'come back home' is more natural; 'hand phone' is incorrect—use 'phone' or 'mobile phone'. Also 'open my phone' is idiomatic for viewing photos. Suggestion: use standard noun forms ('phone') and common collocations ('come back home').

× I can see and memorize what I have done whenever I travel.

✓ I can see and remember what I did whenever I travel.

Using 'memorize' is odd here; 'remember' fits better. Also mixing 'have done' with 'whenever I travel' is awkward—use simple past 'did' for specific past events or present perfect for unspecified time. Suggestion: choose consistent tense; for repeated past actions use simple past ('did') or present perfect when appropriate ('have done').

× So I think it's very important for me to memorizing my memory.

✓ So I think it's very important for me to remember my memories.

After 'to' use the base verb form ('remember'), not gerund 'memorizing'. 'Memorizing my memory' is redundant—use 'remember my memories' or simply 'preserve my memories'. Suggestion: after 'to' use infinitive and avoid redundancy ('memory' already implies remembering).

× I prefer Fuse in rural areas because I love how the people enjoying their time in that present.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I love how the people enjoy their time in the present.

Likely 'Fuse' and 'that present' are wrong words. 'Views' fits the question. 'Enjoying' should be 'enjoy' to match simple present for habitual actions. Use 'in the present' or better 'in the moment' if intended. Suggestion: use 'views' not 'Fuse', and for habitual actions use simple present ('people enjoy').

× I love to see the farmers, uh, farming. They farm and enjoy.

✓ I love to see the farmers farming. They farm and enjoy themselves.

'They farm and enjoy' is grammatically possible but sounds incomplete; add 'themselves' for clarity. 'Farmers farming' is acceptable as noun + present participle to describe ongoing activity. Suggestion: add reflexive pronoun 'themselves' to indicate they enjoy their activity.

× I prefer the queues in my own country because it has a huge variety of landscapes from pink sands and beautiful mountains.

✓ I prefer the views in my own country because it has a huge variety of landscapes, from pink sands to beautiful mountains.

'Queues' is incorrect word choice; 'views' matches context. Also 'from ... and ...' should be 'from ... to ...' when indicating a range. 'It has' refers to 'my country' (singular) which is fine. Suggestion: choose correct nouns ('views') and use 'from A to B' for ranges.

× Hike mountains.

✓ I hike mountains.

'Hike mountains' is missing the subject; in a spoken answer use 'I hike mountains' or 'I go hiking in the mountains.' Suggestion: include subject and correct verb form to make a full sentence.

× For example, police are popular destination for both local and tourists because it combines beautiful beaches.

✓ For example, Palawan is a popular destination for both locals and tourists because it combines beautiful beaches.

'Police' is likely a mispronunciation or wrong word; an island or place name (e.g., 'Palawan') fits the context. 'Are' should be 'is' for a singular destination. 'Local' should be plural 'locals'. 'Combines' agrees with singular subject. Suggestion: use correct place names and match verb number and noun plurality ('is a popular destination for both locals and tourists').