Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant and shows enthusiasm with some specific details (angles, compositions, lighting). However, there are a few issues: a few minor vocabulary/word-choice errors (“skin” instead of “site” or “spot”, “per perspective”), slightly awkward sentence flow, and a small lack of cohesion in the last sentence. To improve, correct the word-choice errors, keep answers concise (max 4–5 sentences), use a clear topic sentence, and add a linking phrase before the example (e.g., “For example,”). Also vary vocabulary slightly (use “spot”/“location” instead of “skin”) and ensure pronoun reference is clear.

예시: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking photos of different views because I like experimenting with angles and composition to get the best shot. For example, I often walk around a scenic spot to find interesting perspectives and natural lighting, which makes the image more striking.

제안: Your answer directly addresses the question and gives reasons, but the response is somewhat unorganized and contains informal phrasing (“something creative,” repeated mention of lights). Improve coherence by starting with a clear topic sentence, then adding two specific supporting points linked with conjunctions or linking words. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., “distinctive architecture,” “cityscape lighting”) and avoid repetition.

예시: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the city’s distinctive architecture and creative building designs. Moreover, the cityscape lighting at night—neon signs and illuminated landmarks—creates dramatic scenes that are great for photography.

제안: Good direct answer and clear reasons (new experiences, culture, people, architecture). Grammar needs correction (tense and articles: “that I have never seen before”), and some phrasing can be more concise. Add a linking phrase to connect ideas and provide one specific example of what you enjoy abroad to make it more vivid. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because traveling abroad lets me experience different cultures and sights. For example, I love seeing unfamiliar architecture and meeting local people, which gives me a fresh perspective and a sense of excitement.

× For example, I often walk around a skin to find interesting per perspective and natural lighting.

✓ For example, I often walk around a scene to find interesting perspectives and natural lighting.

The original contains wrong words: 'skin' is a wrong lexical choice; should be 'scene'. 'per perspective' is incorrect; use plural 'perspectives' to match 'interesting' and general meaning. This is not a past participle error per se but correctable under word choice and plural; however, the main fix is replacing incorrect words and using plural for consistency. Suggestion: use 'scene' and plural 'perspectives' to express repeated instances.

× They make the photo more striking.

✓ They make the photos more striking.

The subject 'They' refers to 'perspectives and natural lighting' which is plural and affects 'photo'. Use plural 'photos' to match plural context or reword to 'the photo' with singular referent. Suggestion: keep noun number consistent between subject and object.

× I prefer views in urban areas because I like the special architecture, something creative and I enjoy the light, the fancy lights at night.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because I like the special architecture and creative designs, and I enjoy the lighting, especially the fancy lights at night.

Original sentence has list and conjunction errors and awkward phrase 'something creative'. Fix by creating parallel items in the list and adding conjunctions for clarity. Suggestion: use parallel structure ('architecture and creative designs') and clarify 'lighting' with 'especially' for emphasis.

× I prefer views in other countries because walking abroad will let me see something different and I love the cultures that I never seen before.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because traveling abroad lets me see different things, and I love the cultures that I have never seen before.

'Walking abroad' is unnatural for general travel; 'traveling abroad' or 'visiting other countries' is better. 'Will let me' is future modal but simple present 'lets' fits habitual preference. 'I never seen before' is incorrect; the present perfect 'have never seen' is required to link past experience to the present. Suggestion: use 'have never seen' and prefer 'traveling' for clarity.

× The people, the architecture and everything is new to me and I enjoy this feeling.

✓ The people, the architecture, and everything are new to me, and I enjoy this feeling.

When the subject contains multiple items joined by commas, the verb should be plural: use 'are' not 'is'. Also add Oxford comma for clarity and a comma before conjunction. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement with compound subjects.