Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and clear: give a concise topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and incomplete thoughts. Use linking words (for example, when, because) correctly and finish your idea. Also correct basic grammar (e.g., say “I like taking pictures of different views” and replace “helps me understand, not understand” with a clear reason).

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, when I travel or hang out with friends I photograph landscapes and city scenes because it helps me remember the moment and notice small details I might otherwise miss.

제안: Start with a clear direct answer (urban or rural). Avoid unclear phrases and pronunciation errors written as wrong words (e.g., “girls” instead of “areas”). Give two specific reasons linked with connectors (because, also). Use correct plural and article forms (people, the chance). Keep it to two or three sentences maximum.

예시: I prefer rural views to urban ones. Because rural areas have more natural scenery and wildlife, I can relax there, and I also enjoy watching local people finish their day’s work in quiet streets.

제안: Answer directly and use accurate vocabulary (say “my country” and avoid “rooms”). Provide clear reasons and a specific example with correct grammar and word order. Use linkers like “because” and “for example,” and describe the example more precisely (e.g., colours, architecture, historical sites).

예시: I prefer views in my own country because it has many historical and modern buildings side by side. For example, in Samarkand you can admire brightly coloured historic monuments and intricate tilework that really show the city’s rich architectural heritage.

× Taking pictures of different views, for example when I hang out with my friends or when I am traveling, helps me understand, not understand.

✓ Taking pictures of different views, for example when I hang out with my friends or when I travel, helps me understand.

The phrase 'when I am traveling' is grammatically correct but inconsistent with the simple present habit expressed elsewhere; using 'when I travel' keeps tense consistent. Also 'understand, not understand' is unclear and likely a repetition error; it should be 'helps me understand.' Suggest using the simple present 'travel' for general habits and remove the repeated fragment.

× If I had chance prefer girls in urban or areas, I would choose rural because in rural areas you can see a lot of nature and animals and you can see peoples who came out from work.

✓ If I had the chance to choose between urban and rural areas, I would choose rural because in rural areas you can see a lot of nature and animals and people who have finished work.

Original contains multiple issues but corrections limited to modal/conditional structure: add 'the' and 'to choose' after 'had the chance' to form the correct conditional. 'Prefer girls' is likely wrong word choice; replaced with 'choose between urban and rural areas' to fit meaning. Also corrected 'peoples who came out from work' to 'people who have finished work' to use correct plural 'people' and present perfect to indicate recent action. Suggest using 'If I had the chance to choose...' for correct conditional modal expression.

× I don't have any.

✓ I don't have any photos.

The pronoun 'any' is vague without a noun. Add the appropriate noun 'photos' to clarify meaning. Suggest always include the noun after 'any' when context requires specificity.

× I would say I prefer more rooms in my country because there are a lot of history buildings and modern buildings.

✓ I would say I prefer places in my country because there are a lot of historic buildings and modern buildings.

'Prefer more rooms' is incorrect quantifier/word choice; use 'prefer places' or 'prefer my country' depending on meaning. 'A lot of history buildings' is incorrect; use 'historic buildings' or 'buildings with historical significance.' Replace 'history buildings' with 'historic buildings.' Suggest choosing correct nouns and modifiers: 'a lot of' + plural noun, and use adjective 'historic.'

× For example, in Samarkand you can see a beautiful building colors.

✓ For example, in Samarkand you can see beautiful colored buildings.

'A beautiful building colors' mixes singular and plural and misorders modifiers. Use 'beautiful colored buildings' or 'buildings with beautiful colors.' The adjective should modify 'buildings,' and plural must match. Suggest reordering to 'beautiful colored buildings' or 'buildings with beautiful colors.'